Question

阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

A peacock was very unhappy with his ugly voice; and he spent most of his days complaining about it.
"It is true that you cannot sing;" said the fox, "but look how beautiful you are!"
"0b，but what good is all this beauty;" cried the bird, "with such an unpleasant voice!"
"Listen," said the fox, "each one owns something good: You have such beauty; the nightingale has his song; and the owl has his eyes. Even if you had a sweet voice, you would still complain about another thing. Why can't you just be happy about what you have already got?"
【写作内容】
1.以约30个词概括短文的主要内容。
2.以约120个词就“停止抱怨并珍惜自己所拥有的“这一主题发表你的看法，内容包括：
（l）你或你身边的人的类似事例；
(2）谈谈你对该主题的看法。
【写作要求】
1.作文中可以使用自己的亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得
直接引用原文中的句子：
2.文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
【评分标准】
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。

Answer 1

This story is about a peacock who complained about his ugly voice while actually he is very beautiful. A fox advised him to be content with what he was blessed with.
The peacock reminds of my friend Mike, who is always upset. He complained his parents are too busy to stay at home with him, He complains he is too short to play basketball well. But he never realizes that his parents love him so much, and how beautifully he can play the violin, which makes him the envy of his classmates.
Many people around us focus on what they want instead of what they have. As a result of their endless desires, they are often dissatisfied. In my opinion, we should stay positive and value what we have instead of complaining too much.  If we remain grateful for what we already have and what we can fulfill, we may live a happier life.

试题分析：本文属于读写任务写作，动笔前，一定要认真阅读原文，并理解内容。认真看清题目要求，这篇书面表达给了一段材料：先要求以约30个词概括上文的主要内容，要求有很高的概括提炼的能力，要抓住文章的主题，再以约120个词写一篇短文，按照要点去表达，不能有遗漏，写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。写作时尽量使用自己会的单词、词组和句型，同时也要注意使用一些高级语法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮点说明】范文的一大特点是词汇高级，句式富有变化：remind sb of sth提醒某人…，focus on 专注于..，As a result of由于， In my opinion在我看来, This story is about a peacock who complained about his ugly voice while actually he is very beautiful. 这句话用了定语从句和while表示转折，A fox advised him to be content with what he was blessed with.这句话用了宾语从句， The peacock reminds of my friend Mike, who is always upset.这句话用了非限制性定语从句， He complained his parents are too busy to stay at home with him, 这句话用了too…to句型， how beautifully he can play the violin, which makes him the envy of his classmates.这句话也是非限制性定语从句， Many people around us focus on what they want instead of what they have. we should stay positive and value what we have instead of complaining too much.  If we remain grateful for what we already have and what we can fulfill, we may live a happier life. 这三句话都用了what连接的宾语从句。