Question

假设你叫李华，现是天津大学的一名新生。请你根据以下提示，给你中学的英语老师李老师写一封感谢信，表达对他的爱戴和尊敬。词数100左右。

  提示：

  1.对英语李老师教学的评价。

  2．回顾在校时你的心情。

  3．对老师的理解和祝愿。

  信的开头、结尾已经写好，但不计入总词数。

Dear Mr. Li.

I'm very excited to write to…_______________________________________________

_________________________________________________________________________

     Hoping to hear from you soon.

                                                            Yours,

                                                            Li Hua

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

Dear Mr. Li,

    I’m very excited to write to express my thanks to you. I am now a freshman of Nanjin University, which I have been dreaming about. Mr. Li, I still remember the days when you taught me English. My English has been improved greatly because of your creative work. However, at one time, the pressure of examinations, too much homework and the high expectations made me depressed. I was tired of the warning that if I didn’t do my best, I wouldn’t have the chance to go to college. Thanks for your encouragement; if not, I wouldn’t have realized my dream. And now I really understand you. I wish more and more of your students could go to their ideal colleges. Are you still so busy? How I miss you!

Hoping to hear from you soon.

                                                                                          Yours,

                                                                                           Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：本书面表达是要求学生写一封书信，材料非常简单，学生很容易把握写作要求和写作目的。考生在写作之前必修认真审题，首先要注意文章的时态，首先写现在的状况，所以要用一般现在时。回忆过去的状况和老师的教诲，用一般过去时态。要求让你给英语老师李老师写信，因此本文必须用第一人称。再有就是不能根据材料逐字逐句的翻译应该注意句子的衔接，以提高作文的档次。

【亮点说明】文中使用了非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少，比如be excited to，express sth. to sb.，at one time, be tired of, do one’s best, have the chance to do, realize one’s dream, hear from，还运用了wish引导的虚拟语气和which、when引导的定语从句等等。并注意了句子的衔接如：because of，however, 等等。

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