Question

13．以My life in ten years为题，发挥想象，谈谈自己十年后的会是什么样子．100字左右，注意分段．

Answer 1

分析 （高分句型一）I will love my patients as much as possible and help them out of danger．
该句型使用了as much as possible 这个短语来表达我对会对病人尽可能照顾，帮他们摆脱危险．
（高分句型二）What's more，I'm going to do more exercises to keep me stronger．
首先，使用What's more起到过渡作用，表示递进；句子时态使用be going to do 表示打算、计划好要做的事情；还使用to keep动词不定式表示目的．
固定短语：grow up长大；as much as possible 尽可能多；In order to 表示目的；come true实现；

解答 Everyone has his dream．My ideal job is to be a doctor when I grow up．Ten years later，I think I will be a doctor．（高分句型一）I will love my patients as much as possible and help them out of danger．
   In order to make my dream come true，I will study hard and get more knowledge．（高分句型二）What's more，I'm going to do more exercises to keep me stronger．To be a doctor is really great．I think my dream must come true that day．

点评 这是一篇命题作文，要求写一篇介绍自己未来生活的短文．本题给出的材料较为简略，动笔前应先认真阅读材料，围绕所给材料组织内容，确定主要短语，句式等问题．通过阅读材料可知这篇短文主要使用的人称就是第一人称，主要用一般将来时态进行叙述，这方面需要注意的问题比较少．写作中注意语义通顺，符合逻辑关系．上下文之间可以适当使用连接词．