Question

假设你是新华中学的学生李明，最近从英国朋友David的来信中得知他要过十六岁生日了。
【写作内容】
请通过E-mail，根据下列要点用英语给他写封祝贺信：
1. 祝贺他生日快乐；
2. 感谢他两年来在英语学习方面给你的帮助；
3. 希望他在方便的时候来中国游玩。
参考词汇：look forward to 期盼
【写作要求】
1.必须使用5个句子介绍所给出的全部内容；
2.信的格式已经为你写好，不计入必写句子中。
【评分标准】
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。
Dear David,
_________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours,
Li Ming

Answer 1

Dear David,
I'm very glad to learn that your 16th birthday is coming and I’m eager to join all your friends in wishing you a Happy birthday! It has been two years since we became good friends,and you have offered me so much help with my English study. Now I’ve made great progress in my study, so I really appreciate your help. We helped each other and shared our experience during the last two years, and I hope we’ll be good friends forever. Here I’m looking forward to your coming to China whenever it is convenient for you.
Yours,
Li Ming

试题分析：考查提纲式作文：请通过E-mail，根据下列要点用英语给他写封祝贺信，祝贺他的16岁生日，考生首先要认真阅读前面的提示，认清写作要求和提纲之间的关系，这篇文章的提纲很详细，根据所给提纲，以此为基础充分发挥自己的想象力，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将各要点完整地表述出来，注意主次分明，详略得当。语言力求准确、简洁。根据情景的发展，按顺序安排好材料。同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性。还有题目要求必须使用5个句子介绍所给出的全部内容；所以尽量用并列句和复杂句。
【亮点说明】 I'm very glad to learn that your 16th birthday is coming and I’m eager to join all your friends in wishing you a Happy birthday! 这句话用了并列句和wish sb in doing“祝愿某人…”，It has been two years since we became good friends,and you have offered me so much help with my English study.这句话用了It has been +一段时间+since…句型， Now I’ve made great progress in my study, so I really appreciate your help. 这句话用了结果状语从句， Here I’m looking forward to your coming to China whenever it is convenient for you. 这句话用了动名词做宾语和让步状语从句。