Question

Florence Chadwick was a great swimmer. However, not all of her efforts worked out. In addition to working hard, she had a secret for success. At the age of 34, her goal was to become the first woman to swim from Catalina Island to the California coast. However, in 1952, the sea was like an ice bath and the fog was so dense that she could hardly see her support boats. Her body was numb(麻木) and she had been swimming for nearly 16 hours. Against the cold grip of the sea, she struggled on—hour after hour—while millions watched on national television. Alongside Florence, in one of the boats, her mother and her trainer offered encouragement. They told her it wasn’t much farther. But all she could see was fog. They urged her not to quit. She never had… until then. With only a half mile to go, she asked to be pulled out. Still warming her chilled body several hours later, she told a reporter, “Look, I’m not excusing myself, but if I could have seen land I might have made it.” It was not tiredness or even the cold water that defeated her. It was the fog. She was unable to see her goal. Two months later, she tried again. Despite the same dense fog, she swam with her faith intact（未受影响的）and her goal clearly pictured in her mind. She knew that somewhere behind that fog was land and this time she made it!

【写作内容】

你准备参加学校最近组织的一次英文演讲比赛，主题是“The Value of Goals”。在准备演讲时，你读到上面的文章，给你很大的启发。请准备一份演讲稿。开头部分已给出，但不计入总词数。

1、以约30个词概括短文的要点；

2、然后以约120个词谈谈你对“目标的重要性”的看法，内容包括：

1）你读完这个故事的感受；

2）谈谈你是如何理解目标在人生当中所起的作用的；

3）鼓励大家要树立目标，并为目标的实现而努力。

[写作要求]：

1．在作文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2．作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

 [评分标准]：概括准确、语言规范、内容合适、篇章连贯

Several days ago, I came across a story about Glorence Chadwick, __________

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

One possible version：

Several days ago, I came across a story about Glorence Chadwick, the first woman who succeeded in swimming the Catalina Channel. It was a goal in her mind that enabled her to make the breakthrough regardless of dense fog, which failed her in her first attempt.

I was deeply inspired by such a story, as it makes me realize the power of a goal in shaping one’s success and gives me strength to pursue my goal, despite the hardships I am to go through.

In my view, goals are crucial to guiding our lives. To begin with, as goals often go with hopes, they have the magic to enable us to be positive towards ups and downs. Moreover, bearing goals in mind, we are less likely to be blind to the ideals of our life and be distracted from our way to success. Finally, as goals are what we are longing for, they thus can motivate us to strive for greater achievement, making our lives more fulfilling.

Since goals are so significant to our lives, it is worthwhile for us students to set up goals and accomplish them with every effort we can make.

【解析】

试题分析：首先通读短文，了解大意。找出短文的关键词，尤其是每段都论及的名词。划出短文及各个段落的主题句。写出1－3句话，概括全文。利用文章所给的语言材料, 分析归纳句组间的逻辑关系, 并用自己的话来写作。概括要全面, 删去细节, 保留主要事实(信息)。语言要简练, 概括后的字数必须满足题目要求(30个字左右)。概括后的文章意思要通顺, 行文要连贯。下面在根据要点提示写出下面的内容，注意时态及语态。认真检查，避免错误。仔细阅读全文，查找是否有错，注意时态、单词拼写、字母大小写、标点是否有误，句式是否正确．逻辑是否一致。

【亮点说明】文中使用了非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少，比如came across, succeeded in, regardless of,还运用了which 及who引导的定语从句及强调句型It was a goal in her mind that…等等。并注意了句子的衔接如：In my view，To begin with, Moreover，Finally等等。

考点：读写任务。