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6．假定你是高中生李华，对西方文化非常感兴趣，想在暑假去英国旅游．请你给你的英国网友戴维（David）发一封电子邮件．内容包括：
1．旅游目的；   2．旅游计划；    3．需要的帮助．
注意：1．词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
特别提醒：字迹模糊潦草，卷面不整洁，不分段落直接扣除2-5分．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇材料类作文，假定是高中生李华，对西方文化非常感兴趣，想在暑期去英国旅游．给英国网友戴维（David）发一封电子邮件．内容包括：旅游目的；旅游计划；需要的帮助．词数100左右，可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
文中第一段直接点题说明要点，并在最后加以说明发电子邮件的目的．第二段包含了三个要点内容，并在最后用问句形式点明"迫切需要帮助"紧扣主题．并在第三段适当发挥，表示感谢．整篇文章从语法来看，没犯语法错误；从内容上看简洁明了，符合英文电子邮件的特点，让人读起朗朗上口，是一篇很值得借鉴的文章．
亮点说明：
范文使用了一些重要的语法知识：结果状语从句so that I can experience English culture personally；宾语从句 which places of interest are well worth visiting；固定句型This is the …time that sb．have/has done sth．
范文注意使用了现在完成进行时、一般现在时、一般将来时等不同的时态来叙述不同的事情，对时态有较好的把握．
范文运用一些亮点词汇词组如be well worth visiting、tourist attraction、appreciate等使作文内容更加充实，表达更加生动．
I have been expecting to travel to the UK so that I can experience English culture personally．（高分句型一）
Since this is the first time that I have traveled abroad，I would like to know which places of interest are well worth visiting．（高分句型二）
 I would appreciate it if you could write back to me soon．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear David，
      I have been expecting to travel to the UK so that I can experience English culture personally．（高分句型一） I am writing to ask for some advice．
      My parents and I plan to travel to the UK during the summer holidays．We are to spend a week in London．Since this is the first time that I have traveled abroad，I would like to know which places of interest are well worth visiting．（高分句型二）Can you offer me some advice and recommend some tourist attractions to me？
      I would appreciate it if you could write back to me soon．（高分句型三）
                                                                                                                                                                                                       Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                       Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．