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5．假设你是学生李华，得知好朋友William在学习中感到压力很大，学习效果甚微，请你按照以下要点给他写一封电子邮件，帮助他放松身心，提高学习效率．
1．快乐学习，保持愉快的心情；
2．积极参加体育活动，听听歌曲音乐；
3．多与同学交流，互相鼓励．
注意：1．词数100左右，开头和结尾已经为你写好（不记入总词数），但不得抄入答题卡内．
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
Dear William，
Recently，I have heard that you feel stressed about study．I have a good mind to offer you some advice on how to study effectively．

Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文要求写一封电子邮件给自己的好朋友William，给他建议帮助他放松身心，提高学习效率，建议涉及三方面：快乐学习，保持愉快的心情；积极参加体育活动，如打乒乓球、听音乐等；多与同学交流，互相鼓励．学写作时注意以下几点：1．涵盖所有内容．2、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用现在时，用第一人称．3、注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】
文章使用了非常好的短语和句子给文章增色，如 现在分词作结果状语 making study an easy job．making us memorize things faster and longer．；not only …but also，把not only放句首用倒装Not only does exercise build up the body，but also it provides us time to relax and fresh our mind，；which引导的非限制性定语从句…，which will encourage us to overcome difficulties in our study；还有First of all，Last but not least等有效地使语句间连接紧凑．

解答 Dear William，
  Recently，I have heard that you feel stressed about study．I have a good kind to offer you some advice on  how to study effectively．
  First of all，learn in a relaxing way．This will remove our pressure，making study an easy job．（高分句型1）One way to keep up our spirits is to take part in sports．Not only does exercise build up the body，but also it provides us time to relax and fresh our mind．（高分句型2）In this way we can memorize things faster and longer．（高分句型3）Music，too，is another effective means of refreshing and helping us concentrate better．
  Last but not least，we should exchange ideas with our classmates．Through the communication we can find support，which will encourage us to overcome difficulties in our study．（高分句型4）Keep trying，and we will make it．
  I hope all these can benefit you．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                        Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                        Li Hua

点评 提纲类作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点，写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需要积累短语和重要句型．