Question

假如你是李华,最近，你班同学就中学生是否可以带手机上学进行了讨论。请你根据下列信息，给校长写一封信，客观地介绍你班讨论的情况。

70%的学生认为	30%的学生认为
1. 没有必要带手机。 2．带手机会分散学习精力，上课开机影响极坏。 3. 学生用手机会增加家长经济负担。	1．学生可以带手机上学，但上课要关机。 2．学生带手机可以方便联系。 3．信息时代的交流工具，不应禁止

1.词数:100字左右    2.经济负担economic burdens.   3.信的开头已经为你写好
Dear principle,
I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we’ve had about whether a mobile phone should be brought to school. ——————————————————————————————

Answer 1

One possible version：
Dear principle,
I am writing to tell you about the discussion we have about whether a mobile phone should be brought to school
To tell you the truth , the students in our class have different opinions .About 70% of the students think that we shouldn’t bring mobile phones to school .Because with them we may not fix our attention to the lessons .If the phone is no t turned off by chance and the ringing will destroy the class. Furthermore  , using mobile phones will add to our parents’ economic burdens .However , about 30%of the students think we can bring phones to school on condition that we turned off them in class .With a mobile phone it is convenient for us to keep in touch with our parents and friends。Besides , the mobile phone is a tool of information times .It may not be right to ban students from carrying mobile phones.
Yours sincerely
LiHua

解析试题分析：本篇书面表达要求给校长写一封信汇报班级就“中学生是否可以带手机”进行的讨论结果。所以文章在开头首先要讲明写信的目的。其次，在介绍学生们的观点看法时要用一般现在时；文章要求客观地介绍讨论结果，所以文中要避免出现表达个人观点态度的词。此外，在陈述要点时要加入适当的连接词以使语句通顺，内容连贯，结构紧凑。
【亮点说明】文章要点全面，结构清晰，开头表明写信的目的，然后分别介绍了两种不同的观点。文中插入语To tell you the truth和Furthermore 、Besides、However等表示递进、转折意义副词的使用使文章上下文衔接自然，紧凑，而且文中原因状语从句.Because with them we may not fix our attention to the lessons、条件状语从句If the phone is no t turned off by chance; on condition that we turned off them in class、宾语从句that we shouldn’t bring mobile phones to school的使用也显示了作者对语言的熟练运用能力。此外With a mobile phone等短语也避免了句式的单一。总之，这是一篇优秀的范文。
考点：考查提纲作文。