Question

一家知名外资企业准备与当地政府合作修建一所国际学校为了、建办﹑好学校，该企业总裁Mr. White广泛征求学生意见，并公开了他的邮地址。
请你以李华的名义给他写一封E-mail，谈谈你的建议及理由。
内容要点：
1．学习环境 （如：教室，操场……）
2. 特色课程（如：网球，钢琴……）
3. ……
要求：
1. 词数100左右
2. 文中不能出现自己的姓名和学校的名称。
3. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Dear Mr. White,
I am glad to hear you will build an international school, and I’d like to give you some advice. ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 
                                                                                            
    
I hope I can enter the school. 
Sincerely yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Mr. White,
I am glad to hear you will build an international school, and I’d like to give you some advice. I think the new school should be nice and pleasant. Students need bright classrooms to study and modern libraries to broaden their horizons and large playgrounds to play different kinds of sports on.
The school may provide students with some special courses, such as art, tennis or piano lessons. These courses can make students relax and encourage them to develop freely. It would be better for students to have some chances to practice in your company so that they get some useful experience.                                                  
I hope I can enter the school. 
Sincerely yours,
Li Hua

解析试题分析：这是一篇书信类作文，也是提纲类作文，我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来. 动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题。本作文中给出的要点不够具体,故需要考生发挥，准确表达.写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化。
【亮点说明】Students need bright classrooms to study and modern libraries to broaden their horizons and large playgrounds to play different kinds of sports on. 这句话用了不定式做目的状语， The school may provide students with some special courses, such as art, tennis or piano lessons. 这句话用了词组：provide sb with sth“提供某人某物”，These courses can make students relax and encourage them to develop freely. 这句话用形容词做宾语补足语和不定式做宾语补足语，It would be better for students to have some chances to practice in your company so that they get some useful experience.这句话用了it做形式主语，和so that句型。
考点：考查书信类书面表达