Question

14．假设你是阳光社区业主，你希望在小区内增加一个小公园，从而方便老人锻炼，儿童玩耍，并提升绿化面积．请你给业主委员会写封建议信，100词左右．
开头结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
Dear committee members，
                          ．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息给业主委员会写封建议信，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：你希望在小区内增加一个小公园，从而方便老人锻炼，儿童玩耍，并提升绿化面积 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：
As is well-known to us all，it is very important to have a healthy body for everyone．（高分句型一） 句中使用As is well-known to us all，众所周知
 I really hope that early in the morning I can see children play games in parks and there are more trees and grass．（高分句型二）句中使用that引导的宾语从句
 I would appreciate it if you can adopt my suggestion and I look forward to your reply as soon as possible．（高分句型三）it 为形式宾语

解答 Dear committee members，
     I'very delighted to write a letter to you．As is well-known to us all，it is very important to have a healthy body for everyone．（高分句型一）There is no doubt that we need a place to do exercise．
      In the world today，more and more people are interested in sports and games．However，there is no place in our community to take exercise．Therefore，wo do hope that our community will build a healthy park for old people to do sports and play games．We all know that sports and games can help to keep people healthy and help people to do their work better．I really hope that early in the morning I can see children play games in parks and there are more trees and grass．（高分句型二）
     I would appreciate it if you can adopt my suggestion and I look forward to your reply as soon as possible．（高分句型三）

Yours，
Li Hua．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．