Question

图片中一位老人在小河边为满脸泪痕的孙子洗脸。请你对图片内容用英语进行描述并谈自己对留守儿童这一现象的感受。字数为100个词左右。

Answer 1

One possible version:
I was shocked by the picture at first sight. In the picture, by a small river, a little boy had tears on his lovely face and an old man, maybe his grandfather, was wiping his tears. From the clothes they are wearing we can see that they are poor. The boy was sad. Is it because his parents are working in a place far away from home and the boy is missing them day and night?
I think so. At present, many parents leave their children at home in order to support their family. These parents have no choice. I hope something can be done to help these parents get back home as soon as possible.

试题分析：本篇作文主要是看图作文，高中英语的看图作文写作有4个要求，3个步骤。这4个要求是：1、要点齐全；2、结构连贯；3、用词准确多样；4、书写整洁标准。3个步骤是：1、画出图片中的要点；2、将要点用英语表达出来，表达的时候要注意用多样的词汇来表达类似的意思，以及注意长短句相结合，善用连接词；3、最后写在卷子上，注意书写工整。
图片清晰，学生很容易把握写作要求和写作目的。考生在写作之前必修认真审题，首先要注意文章的时态，要求是对学生日常生活中存在的留守儿童现象给予关注，所以要用一般现在时。要求让你留守儿童的感受，因此本文必须用第一人称。再有就是不能根据图片描述图片中的老人与儿童而已，应该注意联想到孩子的家庭状况，什么原因使他们独自在家----那是因为父母离开家到外面打工挣钱以至于孩子日日思念，但为了谋生其父母不得不这样做，最后要注意用一些连接词把句子衔接起来，以提高作文的档次。
【亮点说明】文中使用了非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少，比如had tears on his lovely face，wiping his tears，I think so, far away from home，missing them，day and night，help these parents get back home ，at first sight还运用了表语从句Is it because his parents are working in a place far away from home; 句子many parents leave their children at home in order to support their family.中引用in order to 引导目的状语；宾语从句I hope something can be done to help these parents get back home as soon as possible.
等等。并注意了句子的衔接如： In order to，I think so. because等等。