Question

7．你所在学校在校报上开辟英文专栏，邀请大家分享心目中的"最好礼物"．
【写作内容】
假设你是李华，请根据以下信息用英文写一篇文章，内容包括：

	礼物	意义
收到的最好礼物	明信片	1好朋友送给我的生日礼物 2朋友以我的名义捐赠免费早餐基金收到的明信片 3意味着我为贫困学童提供免费午餐
送出的最好礼物	洗脚盆	1送给父亲的父亲节礼物 2父亲工作很辛苦，洗脚有助于放松 3有时可以帮父亲洗脚，让父亲感受到孩子的关心

*免费早餐基金：Free Lunch**洗脚盆：foot basin
***以…的名义 in the name of
【写作要求】
只能用5个句子表达全部内容；
【评分标准】
句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯．

Answer 1

分析 本文采用了"表格+提纲类"形式，根据文章所给提示信息给校报英文专栏写一篇文章，分享心目中的"最好礼物"．写作要点：1．收到的最好礼物：明信片、意义2．送出的最好礼物：洗脚盆、意义．  既是提纲作文又是图表类作文．写作时时态以一般现在时和一般过去时为主．人称以第一人称和第三人称为主．重要短语：donate sth to  （捐赠给…），in the name of （以…的名义），be deeply moved by （被深深地打动…），make contributions to doing （做贡献…），as for （关于），not only…，but also…（不但…而且），feel one's affection （感受到某人的爱），care for （关心）．
【高分句型】
1．The best gift that I have ever received is a post card from my best friend as my birthday present．
这里是that引导的定语从句，先行词是the best gift，that在定语从句中作receive的宾语．
2．①not only can my father relax himself after a day's hard work，but also sometimes I can help him wash his feet，②which can help him feel my affection and care for him．
这里是部分倒装句型．"Not only+一般疑问句…，but also+…"，not only后的句子倒装，而but also后的句子不倒装．
②这里是which引导的非限制性定语从句，which在从句中作主语，指代前面整个句子的内容．

解答 The best gift that Ihave ever received is a post card from my best friend as my birthday present．【高分句型】It is a post card my friend received from Free Lunchbecause he had donated some money to this project in the name of me．I was deeply moved by this simple present because whatmy friend did means that I have made my contributions to helping buy the poorchildren free lunch．（收到的最好礼物：明信片、意义）
As for the best gift Ihave even given，I think it must be a foot basin for myfather as a Father's Day present．With it，not only can my father relax himself after a day's hardwork，but also sometimes I can help him wash his feet，which can help him feel my affection and care for him．【高分句型】（送出的最好礼物：洗脚盆、意义）

点评 写好这类图表及提纲式作文的关键是认真分析所给提示信息，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将要点完整地表述出来，并认真看图，围绕主题，提炼要点，发挥想象，语言力求准确、简洁．选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性．同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，最后还要认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等．