Question

【题目】每个人的成长都是一种蜕变的过程，从幼稚走向成熟，从逆境走向成功。请你用英语写一篇80词以上 的短文，谈谈你在成长过程中所经历的最大的一次蜕变。

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Answer 1

【答案】From immaturity to maturity,from adversity to success, everyone’s growing progress is a kind of changing one. So is mine .

At first,I was shy and I used to stay in the classroom instead of playing with classmates after class. I only like playing computer games at home. Because I hated English ,my English mark is very low in the exam.Later ,a girl came to my class,and she changed my life.She became my best friend. She asked me to play outside with others .She helped me with my English by encouraging me to read English aloud ,to talk to her in English. I also practice English after school. Gradually, My English score was higher and higher. Now,I am a confident and outgoing girl .I have changed so much that many people like to make friends with me .

【解析】试题分析：这是一篇提纲作文。主要写其变化前后的样子、促成其转变的主要原因和其为此变化付出的努力。写作时注意时态、语态的合理运用，写过去用一般过去时，转变后的现在用一般现在时。写作时要求主次分明，详略得当，语言力求准确、简洁。根据情景的发展，按顺序安排好材料。同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

【亮点说明】文中使用了非常好的短词为文章增色不少，首先是from ...to..., a kind of,used to,instead of,help with.等固定词组，其次还运用了at first，later,gradually, now等使层次更清晰。Because I hated English ,my English mark is very low in the exam.原因状语从句；I have changed so much that many people like to make friends with me .ｓｏ―――ｔｈａｔ引导的结果状语从句；另外，文章整体内容饱满，条理清晰，表达流畅。