Question

【题目】假设你是生李华。你的英国朋友Smith给你发来电子邮件，询问你们学校正在开展的绿化校园的“最美校园”活动。请你根据以下提示，回一封电子邮件。

内容包括：1.活动的目的和内容；

2.活动的意义。

注意：1. 词数100左右；

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3.请务必按规范书写，确保整洁。

参考词汇：最美校园活动the Most Beautiful Campus Campaign

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Yours ,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Smith,

Nowadays, with damage to the environment getting more and more serious, pollution has become a wide concern for us. As far as I am concerned, it’s high time that we took some measures to protect the environment.

There are many things we can do to protect the environment. We can recycle some useful garbage before they are thrown away and put the harmful in a safe place. We can reclean smoke and waste water before they go into the air or the rivers. What’s more, we have every reason to make full use of natural resources, or we will be in great damage very soon.

To save the environment is to save ourselves. Only when everyone becomes fully conscious how important it is to protect the earth and takes effective measures to safeguard it, can we gain sustainable development with a bright future to greet.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】本文为提纲式作文，主要向英国朋友发一电子邮件来回答关于学校正在开展的绿化校园的“最美校园”活动。提纲式作文的写作主要分三步：

第一步：审题，确定体裁格式、主体时态、中心人称和内容要点，避免填表式或履历表式表达。通过分析可知是说明文，主体时态为一般时，内容要点包括：1.活动的目的和内容；2.活动的意义。

第二步：拟定提纲，创造良好的开端；叙述得体，布局谋篇；巧妙过渡，完美结尾。

第三步：遣词造句，套用句型，上下要用衔接，表达要地道，行文要成篇。

亮点分析：本文中使用了It’s high time that…的虚拟语气句型如：it’s high time that we took some measures to protect the environment.省略关系词的定语从句，如There are many things（that） we can do to protect the environment。由before引导的时间状语从句如：We can reclean smoke and waste water before they go into the air or the rivers，复杂句如：We can recycle some useful garbage before they are thrown away and put the harmful in a safe place。由or引导的并列句如What’s more, we have every reason to make full use of natural resources, or we will be in great damage very soon.。由only+状语置于句引导的部分倒装句型：Only when everyone becomes fully conscious how important it is to protect the earth and takes effective measures to safeguard it, can we gain sustainable development with a bright future to greet.。在文章还运用了动词不定式作主语和表语如：To save the environment is to save ourselves.。

在文中使用连词，如What’s more，让文章过渡自然流畅。一些高级词汇如As far as I am concerned, become a wide concern for becomes fully conscious，make full use of natural resources,，takes effective measures to safeguard，gain sustainable development with a bright future to greet.，高级词汇的运用让文更加的有完美。

总之，本文既有复杂句又有简单句，即有定语从句，又有状语从句和名词从句，又有倒装句的运用，同时还运用了非谓语，连词及高级词汇的运用。可谓句式多变，上下衔接，遣词造句。地道而有层次，不愧为一篇好文章。