Question

寒假中，你的父母以和你谈起报考大学的事儿，请你结合他们的意见和自己的想法写一篇英语短文，投稿到某中学生英语报，和大家分享你的看法。要点如下：

1、选择什么样的大学或专业？

2、选择的理由？(两点)

3、最后一个学期的打算？

注意：

1. 词数：不少于120词；

2. 开头已给出，但不计入总词数；

3. 可适当增加情节，以使行文连贯。

Dear Editor,

I’m writing to share my ideas about my future college or major.

Yours sincerely

Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Editor,

I’m writing to share my ideas about my future college or major.

The time is getting closer and closer when I have to make a decision on what kind of college to go. Combining my parents’ advice with my opinion, I think it is a better choice to make foreign language as my major, such as English or German. The reason why I make such a choice is that I’m fond of foreign language very much. I always find foreign language an attraction to my curiosity. What’s more, mastering one or two foreign languages will provide me more chance to travel or learn abroad, which accordingly will broaden my mind.

Therefore, I think I have no choice but to fight for the last battle to realize my dream. I’m determined to meet the possible hardship and challenge in the last term and make it.

Yours sincerely

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：考官评卷首先会根据文章的内容和语言判定作文所属的档次，然后从：内容切题，语言表达准确、多样、连贯、得体，这几个方面评定分数。注意条理要清晰，逻辑顺序和结构要恰当，同时要尽量保持简洁精干的内容，不拖泥带水。要注意题中所给的信息，不可偏题，应用文写作对于文章内容的要求是要达到写作目的。尽量保持卷面整洁，字体美观，注意行文的连贯性。

【亮点说明】第二段第一句是一个时间状语从句和宾语从句的复合句。The time is getting closer and closer when I have to make a decision on what kind of college to go.距离我必须做出上哪样的大学的决定的时间越来越近。When引导的时间状语修饰time，what引导的宾语从句修饰decisioin on。第二句首先用了一个分词做状语：Combining my parents’ advice with my opinion,结合我父母的建议和我的想法；然后用了形式主语结构 it is。第三句使用了一个原因状语从句和表语从句的复合句。The reason why I make such a choice is that I’m fond of foreign language very much. 我这样做决定是因为我非常喜欢外语。I always find foreign language an attraction to my curiosity. 第五句mastering也是现在分词做伴随状语，后半句是which引导的非限制性定语从句，which修饰前面整个句子。What’s more, mastering one or two foreign languages will provide me more chance to travel or learn abroad, which accordingly will broaden my mind.更重要的是，掌握一两门外语将会给我提供更多出国旅行和学习的机会，这将相应的开阔我的内心。文章除了大量的使用复杂句之外，还是用了一些比较好的短语和结构。高级短语：am fond of 喜欢；find foreign language an attraction to my curiosity发现外语吸引着我的好奇心；What’s more,更重要的是；therefore因此，have no choice but to别无选择，只能…。这些好的短语结构都为文章增色不少。

考点：考察应用文写作。