Question

阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。
A young man was slapped in the face until he bled because he didn’t offer his seat to a woman with a baby on a bus in downtown Hangzhou. Later he was proved to be a disabled person.
In a series of cases nationwide, we see people being beaten for refusing to give up their seats on public transport, which seems to be a moral problem about correct behavior and self-sacrifice.
People with moral deficiency (who don’t give up their seats to deserving people) can be condemned, but they don’t deserve to be treated with violence because they offend moral values and not laws. In comparison, the attackers behave worse.
The attackers regard relying on violence as their only choice if people ignore their appeals to give up their seats. It seems they start a shout or a fight for the sake of justice, but can they still think of their personal intention when they call violence justice?
This “violent justice” can confuse many people and encourage them to do the same, especially when we are overpowered by illogical mood.
If cruel and rude acts are rooted in children’s hearts, society will never step into civilization. The practice violates common values, neither solving problems nor safeguarding civilized society.
【写作内容】
1、以约30个词概括短文的要点。
2、以约120个词谈谈你对这一事件的看法，内容包括：
1）读完这则新闻，你有什么感受？
2）假如你是车上的一名乘客，你会怎样做？
3）就如何创建和谐社会提出你的建议。
【写作要求】
你可以使用实例或其它论述方法支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不要抄袭阅读材料中的句子。
【评分标准】
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。

Answer 1

The news is about a young disabled man attacked on a bus for not offering his seat to a woman with a baby, which leads a debate about who is right and who is wrong.
I am so upset that in our society the woman with a baby should be so implite. it was wrong of her to get her justice with violence, which really will do great harm to our society.
Today in our society ,many other people like her would take it for granted that they should be offered a seat on the crowded bus, as the morality requires. However, it I were a passenger on the crowded bus, I would stand out to tell her that the young man is also in need of help because of his disability。So it is still a long way for us to build up a harmonious society. i my opinion, we should fight against the violent justice and try every means to avoid it from happening so as to solve such kind of problems an safeguard our civilized society

试题分析：这篇书面表达给了一段材料：先要求以约30个词概括上文的主要内容，再以约120个词写一篇短文，内容包括：（1）读完这则新闻，你有什么感受？ 2）假如你是车上的一名乘客，你会怎样做？ 3）就如何创建和谐社会提出你的建议。这道题目要求比较严格，所以在写作之前一定要看清题目。题目还要求你可以使用实例或其它论述方法支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不要抄袭阅读材料中的句子。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。写作时尽量使用自己会的单词、词组和句型，同时也要注意使用一些高级语法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
点评：本文属于根据原文内容写作，动笔前，一定要认真阅读原文，并理解内容。认真看清题目要求，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题。平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果。