Question

假如你是李华，向来望江三中参观的外国朋友介绍学校绿化美化的情况。内容包括：
（1）提高了爱护校园环境的意识；
（2）栽种了许多花草树木；
（3）养成爱护环境的良好习惯。
注意：
1. 词数100左右；
2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3. 文章的开头已经给出。
Hello, everyone:
Now I’m glad to introduce some work that we have done to improve our school environment.
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Thanks for your listening.

Answer 1

Hello, everyone :
Now I’m glad to introduce some work that we have done to improve our school environment.
First of all, we have made great efforts to have environmental education in our school, so that the teachers and students have got a better understanding of the importance of creating and protecting good environment. Secondly, to make our school beautiful, we have planted many trees, flowers on our campus, which actually has turned our school into a beautiful garden. The most important thing is that we are getting into an environmental friendly habit.
As a result, we now have such a beautiful and clean school with us. Good surroundings, as you know, make it possible for us to study and live happily.
Thanks for your listening.

试题分析：考查提纲类作文，要点都已经给出，向来望江三中参观的外国朋友介绍学校绿化美化的情况：包括1. 提高了爱护校园环境的意识；2栽种了许多花草树木；3养成爱护环境的良好习惯。审题时注意本文使用的时态，运用合适的语法规则和词汇把各要点都准确表述出。难点在于选择词汇和句型，可以灵活运用省略句，倒装句和强调句型准确表述。如范文里面的to make our school beautiful, we have planted many trees, flowers on our campus, which actually has turned our school into a beautiful garden.这句话里面恰当的运用了不定式做目的状语，和非限制性定语从句，还有要用适当的关联词把文章串联起来：First of allSecondly, As a result等等。
点评：提纲类短文的关键在于要点要全面包括，不能有遗漏和省略。同时注意谋篇布局的顺序，词汇句型的选用，运用合适的连接词连接全文，同时选择高级的词汇和语法项目让文章更有文采。