Question

17．书面表达
留意一下我们的周边，可以发现陪读现象蔚然成风．请你根据以下要点写一篇短文，内容应包括：
（1）简要描述陪读现象；
（2）分析父母陪读的原因（2至3个）；
（3）发表你对此的看法．
注意：（1）短文必须写在指定区域．
      （2）词数100左右．
      （3）内容充实，结构完整，语意连贯．
      （4）书写需清晰、工整．
Should our parents accompany us in studying at school？

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息写一篇短文，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：（1）简要描述陪读现象；（2）分析父母陪读的原因（2至3个）；（3）发表你对此的看法．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：文章运用了非限制性定语从句which will cause them not to develop the ability of selfcontrol in the future．
和who consider it necessary to offer a better living condition to the kids；主语从句what they've ignored is that it will get their kids into the habit of being dependent；so as to，keep track of，in order to等词汇及meanwhile，Nevertheless，so等连接词．

解答 Should our parents accompany us in studying at school？
    In recent years，many parents choose to accompany their children in studying，which has aroused a wide concern．（高分句型一）
    These parents are willing to leave their hometowns，even quit their jobs to follow their children into the campus．Most of them，who consider it necessary to offer a better living condition to the kids，rent an apartment nearby so as to take good care of their children．（高分句型二）Meanwhile，it can allow them to keep track of the kids'academic performance．
    Nevertheless，what they've ignored is that it will get their kids into the habit of being dependent，which will cause them not to develop the ability of selfcontrol in the future．（高分句型三）
    Trust leads to independence．So it seems to me that parents should leave room for children's growth and study，in order to ensure their overall development．

点评 写作对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力．在完成开放性作文时，首先要选择自己熟悉的短语或者句型，在你的能力范围之内，选择句式时要赋予变化，因为这样你才可以更好的驾驭．同时也要选择合适的连接词，把各个要点组织成一个完整的整体，如besides，further，last but not least等．在发表个人观点的时候，可以使用谚语来提升整个文章的档次和文采，也能增加得高分的可能性．