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16．进入高三以来，同学们倍感学习压力，有的同学熬夜学习，甚至课间十分钟也不放过．假设你是李华，请针对这一现象，在penpal world．com网站上用英语发表一下自己的看法与外国中学生进行交流．
注意：1．词数100左右．
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
Hi Fellows，
I'm Li Hua，a senior high student from China．I'd like to share something with you．Since the beginning of senior high，the learning burden makes us students feel more stressed．Many of us often sit up late at night fighting for the College Entrance Exam； even a ten-minute break won't be let go．
As far as I know，lack of sleep does great harm to our heaith．For one thing，we can't concentrate in class if we don't get enough sleep．For another，we may get angry and impatient easily．By the same token，a ten-minute break is definitely necessary，which can help us get rid of tiredness and focus on next class period．A famous proverb goes well，"All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy"．How about your situation and opinion？
Looking forward to your reply．．

Answer 1

分析 （高分句型一）we can't concentrate in class if we don't get enough sleep．
该句式使用if引导的条件状语从句，句意为如果我们没有足够的睡眠，我们在课堂上不能集中注意力；
（高分句型二）By the same token，a ten-minute break is definitely necessary，which can help us get rid of tiredness and focus on next class period．
which引导非限制性定语从句，which做主语；
（高分句型三）A famous proverb goes well，"All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy"．
使用了谚语，劳逸结合；
过渡词：For one thing，---For another一方面，另一方面；

解答 Hi Fellows，
      I'm Li Hua，a senior high student from China．I'd like to share something with you．Since the beginning of senior high，the learning burden makes us students feel more stressed．Many of us often sit up late at night fighting for the College Entrance Exam； even a ten-minute break won't be let go．
     As far as I know，lack of sleep does great harm to our heaith．For one thing，（高分句型一）we can't concentrate in class if we don't get enough sleep．For another，we may get angry and impatient easily．（高分句型二）By the same token，a ten-minute break is definitely necessary，which can help us get rid of tiredness and focus on next class period．（高分句型三）A famous proverb goes well，"All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy"．How about your situation and opinion？
     Looking forward to your reply．

点评 本文是一篇英语短文，采用三段式，语言流畅，内容齐全，结构合理，运用高级句子，如：不带to的动词不定式在句中作宾语补足语；if引导的条件状语从句用在句中；Which引导的非限制性定语从句运用得当；All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy"．著名谚语画龙点睛；For one thing，---For another，尽显文章层次分明．