Question

2．请你代表2015届高三学生给外教Jeff写一封电子邮件，内容包括：
1．邀请他参加2015届高三年级的成人仪式；
2．请他做简短发言；
3．时间：3月30日（周一）下午3：30；
4．地点：学校礼堂．
注意：1．词数不少于50．
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
3．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
　　提示词：成人仪式the Coming-of-age ceremony
Dear Jeff，How is everything going？You know，we are going to be 18，which means a new chapter to us．To celebrate this significant moment，we will hold the Coming-of-age ceremony in our lecture hall at 3：30 pm on March 30th．As one of the most popular teachers in our school life，you are more than welcome to witness the wonderful occasion．If you can give a short speech then，it will be our great honor．Looking forward to seeing you．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，给外教Jeff写一封电子邮件．．邀请他参加2015届高三年级的成人仪式、告知其时间地点并请他作简短发言．
写作时人称以第一和第二人称为主，时态以一般现在时为主．
写作要点：1．开头引出话题-写信的目的； 2．仪式的时间、地点；3．邀请参加并作简短发言．
重要短语：mean sth （意味着某事），a new chapter to us （对…某人来说是新的篇章），celebrate sth（庆祝某事），hold the ceremony（举行仪式），be more than welcome（非常受欢迎），witness the wonderful occasion（见证这个精彩的时刻），give a speech（作演讲），look forward to doing（期望做某事）．
【高分句型一】
1．You know，we are going to be 18，which means a new chapter to us．
此处是由关系代词"which"引导的非限制性定语从句，主句为"we are going to be 18"，关系代词"which"在从句中作主语，指代前面整个主句的内容．
【高分句型二】
2．To celebrate this significant moment，we will hold the Coming-of-age ceremony in our lecture hall at 3：30 pm on March 30th．
此处为由不定式短语"To celebrate this significant moment"作目的状语，主句为"we will hold the Coming-of-age ceremony in our lecture hall at 3：30 pm on March 30th"．
【高分句型三】
3．If you can give a short speech then，it will be our great honor．
此处是由连词"if"引导的条件状语从句，主句为"it will be our great honor"．

解答 Dear Jeff，
How is everything going？You know，we are going to be 18，which means a new chapter to us．【高分句型一】（开头引出话题-写信的目的）
To celebrate this significant moment，we will hold the Coming-of-age ceremony in our lecture hall at 3：30 pm on March 30th．【高分句型二】（仪式的时间、地点）
As one of the most popular teachers in our school life，you are more than welcome to witness the wonderful occasion．If you can give a short speech then，it will be our great honor．【高分句型三】Looking forward to seeing you．（邀请参加并作简短发言）

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．