Question

【题目】一家英语报社向中学生征文，主题是“十年后的我”。请根据下列要求和你的畅想完成短文。

1.家庭 2.工作 3.业余生活

注意：1.词数120左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3.开头语已为你写好。

I often imagine what my life will be like in the future.

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Answer 1

【答案】

I often imagine what my life will like in the future. I think my life will be very different in ten years. I will be twenty-eight years old by then. I will have my own family, probably with a lovely child. I hope I’ll work in a computer company as a program designer. I’ll enjoy my work and get along well with my colleagues. I’ll do a good job in whatever I do. In my free time, I’ll continue to take regular exercise, such as swimming, running and various ball games. On my holidays, I’ll travel around the world. In a word, my life will be much richer and more colorful.

【解析】

试题分析：本文是一篇记叙文，主题是“十年后的我”。在写作时要注意从家庭、工作和业余生活三方面要点着手，因为提示信息较少，所以要充分发挥想象，增加适当的细节以使行文连贯，充实内容。比如可以联想到的内容有健身，度假，聚会等等。在写作时尽量使用恰当的连接词，插入语以使文章层次分明，使用多种句式结构和高级词汇亮点来提高文章的档次，如定语从句，宾语从句和状语从句等。此外，因为是畅想未来，所以要用一般将来时。

【亮点说明】本篇范文短小精悍，要点全面，语言简练，时态人称准确，很好的完成了写作任务。在文章开头作者紧扣题目，提出自己对未来的畅想，然后从生活，工作，家庭三个方面描述了自己十年后的生活。在文中作者用到了短语In my free time , In a word , such as等介词短语，避免了文章句式的单一。此外，还用到了宾语从句in whatever I do、I will work in a computer company as a program designer等，这些都给朴素的语言带来了亮点。