Question

假设你是晨光中学的高中生李华。你校拟选拔一批优秀学生，利用暑期到晨曦希望小学为学生辅导英语。你希望参加此活动。请根据以下提示，用英语给校评选组写一封申请信：
● 对此活动的认识（如对本人、学生及社会的益处等）
●个人优势（如性格、独立生活能力、语言能力等）
●你的计划（如怎样进行辅导等）
注意：
1.词数不少于100；   2.可适当加入细节，以使内容充实、行文连贯；
3.信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入词数。
参考词汇： 晨曦希望小学 Chenxi Hope School
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am Li Hua from Class One, Senior Two.                                                                 
                                                                                               
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am Li Hua from Class One, Senior Two. As far as I am concerned, I believe to teach English for pupils from Chenxi Hope School will be good for both the primary-school students and high-school student tutors, which thus will result in substantial social benefits.
I think I am qualified for being the pupils’ English coach, because I have good character, and I’m independent in life and proficient in English. That’s why I apply for the position. I hope I can join the instructive activity.
My plan for coaching the pupils is to teach them by listening, speaking, reading and writing. What’s more important is to stimulate their interests in learning English as a foreign language, creating a good learning environment. I hope you can offer the opportunity.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

试题分析：本文是书信类作文，要求用英语给学校写一封申请信，申请用暑期到晨曦希望小学为学生辅导英语。文章的要点也基本上都给出来了，但不是很具体，考生要把要点全交代，不能有遗漏。而且要拓展内容，在写作的过程中，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，如强调句，倒装句等，让文章更上档次。同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，让文章看起来很有条理，也很流畅。本篇文章在写作时不要啰嗦，力求简洁。
【亮点说明】所给范文语言简洁，应用了一些较好的词组和句子： As far as I am concerned据我所知,be qualified for 合格的，I believe to teach English for pupils from Chenxi Hope School will be good for both the primary-school students and high-school student tutors, which thus will result in substantial social benefits.这句话用了非限制性定语从句， That’s why I apply for the position.这句话用了表语从句， My plan for coaching the pupils is to teach them by listening, speaking, reading and writing. 这句话用了不定式做表语。What’s more important is to stimulate their interests in learning English as a foreign language, creating a good learning environment. 这句话用了主语从句和现在分词。