Question

13．3月8日学校举行一次歌颂女性的演讲活动，请写一篇演讲稿，介绍一位你最尊敬的女性（可以是你的家人、朋友、师长、名人…）
内容：1．描述这位女性
2．她值得你尊敬的原因
3．是什么给你留下深刻印象并做此选择
要求：1．字数100左右，
2．可以适当增加细节，以使用文连贯
3．短文中不能出现与本人相关的信息．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇演讲稿，介绍一位你最尊敬的女性，描述这位女性，值得尊敬的原因及留给自己的深刻印象．要符合演讲稿的语气，注意文章文体、人称和时态．根据所给提纲，列出要点，并以此为基础充分发挥自己的想象力，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将各要点完整地表述出来，注意主次分明，详略得当．语言力求准确、简洁．根据情景的发展，按顺序安排好材料．同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性．
【亮点说明】文中使用非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少，比如takes good care of，bring up，complain，thrifty and industrious，还运用了so that，as，ever since引导的状语从句等等．
She takes good care of her children and keeps them all at school．（高级句型）
As our family is too poor to keep a servant，my mother has always to do very much work．（高级句型）

解答 My Mother
            Good morning，every body!Today my topic is my mother．Do you love your mother？Of course，the answer is"yes"．Mother is always ready to give everything she has to her children，not to receive．My mother is a kind and gentle woman．She is always very gentle．She takes good care of her children and keeps them all at school．（高级句型）I have one brother and two sistets，so she gets four children in all．She gives us every comfort．We all love her and she loves us too．（描述形象）
       My mother has too much to do in bringing us up．As our family is too poor to keep a servant，my mother has always to do very much work．（高级句型）She gets up very early and sleeps very late every day．She works hard，yet without complaining．（高级句型）（尊敬的原因）
       She is also a thrifty and industrious woman．She saves every cent that she can and keeps everything in order．As she has been busy ever since she was young，she looks older than she really is．Her face is wrinkled，her hair becomes silver white，but she works as hard as ever．（深刻印象）

点评 应该注意适当增加细节以使行文连贯，比如适当选用表示因果、递进、转折关系的连接词，使文章流畅、通顺，并避免因反复使用句式相同的简单句而造成的单调感．（1）认真审题，确定体裁． （2）构思要点．根据题目要求，理解要表达的要点．设计好文章的层次段落，考虑所用时态、人称等，把要点串联起来，构成文章框架．（3）选词造句，避难选易．（4）认真检查，避免错误．仔细阅读全文，查找是否有错，注意时态、单词拼写、字母大小写、标点是否有误，句式是否正确．逻辑是否一致．