Question

9．假如你叫李华，你们学校下周六将举行Run for Love 公益活动，旨在为贫困地区的学生和残疾儿童募捐．请给你的朋友Tom 写封电子邮件邀请他一同参加，要点如下：
1．活动的时间、地点及目的；
2．活动的内容：跑步、捐款等．
注意：
1．词数 100 左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．开头和结尾已为你写好，但不计入总词数．
Dear Tom，
I'd like to invite you to join us for the Run for Love．The activity sponsored by some charitable organizations is intended to raise money for students in poor areas and disabled children who need medical treatment．（高分句型一）It is to be held on the playground of our school at 9 am next Sunday．Students，as well as teachers，parents and sponsors，are invited to participate in it．（高分句型二）
The first part of the activity is 800 metres，1，500 metres and 3，000 metres runs．After that，the money-raising part will start．I think the activity not only helps people in need but is a good chance for us to do exercise．（高分句型三）If you are interested，we can go there together．
Looking forward to your reply．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息学校下周六将举行Run for Love 公益活动，旨在为贫困地区的学生和残疾儿童募捐．请给你的朋友Tom 写封电子邮件邀请他一同参加，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：活动的时间、地点及目的；活动的内容：跑步、捐款等． 2、提纲图表是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：is intended to 目的是；raise money筹集钱；participate in参加；not only…but also…不仅…而且；
The activity sponsored by some charitable organizations is intended to raise money for students in poor areas and disabled children who need medical treatment．（高分句型一）
Students，as well as teachers，parents and sponsors，are invited to participate in it．（高分句型二）
I think the activity not only helps people in need but is a good chance for us to do exercise．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Tom，
      I'd like to invite you to join us for the Run for Love．The activity sponsored by some charitable organizations is intended to raise money for students in poor areas and disabled children who need medical treatment．（高分句型一）It is to be held on the playground of our school at 9 am next Sunday．Students，as well as teachers，parents and sponsors，are invited to participate in it．（高分句型二）
      The first part of the activity is 800 metres，1，500 metres and 3，000 metres runs．After that，the money-raising part will start．I think the activity not only helps people in need but is a good chance for us to do exercise．（高分句型三）If you are interested，we can go there together．
      Looking forward to your reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                          Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                          Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．