Question

【题目】假设你是红星中学高三（1）班的学生李华。下面四幅图描述了你们带领留学生Jack看中医(TCM) 的经历。请你根据图片的先后顺序，为校刊“英语角”写一篇短文，介绍你们带Jack看医生前后的全过程。

注意：词数不少于60。

提示词：把脉 feel one’s pulse

Answer 1

【答案】One possible version:

Last month, we took Jack, an American exchange student who fell ill to a traditional Chinese doctor, which turned out to be an eye-widening experience for him.

It was in a math class that I noticed Jack coughing with a runny nose. Everyone looked at him with concern. Seeing this, one classmate and I offered to take him to the TCM department. He hesitated but followed. At the clinic, the doctor first looked at Jack for a while before feeling his pulse and checking his tongue. The doctor then asked if the cough had been on and off for a long time. In great surprise, Jack nodded his head. The doctor then wrote a prescription with instructions on how to take the medicine.

After boiling the herb medicine at home, I brought it to him in his dormitory. The first taste almost made him throw up. It was really too hard even for me. I comforted him with an old saying “Good medicine to the health tastes bitter to the mouth”. Jack managed to swallow the medicine with a frown. But after a week, when he recovered, he felt amazed at the effect of the Chinese medicine. At a class meeting about the deepest impressions about China, Jack chose “TCM in My Eyes” as the topic. He shared his experience of TCM, from doubt at first to belief in the end.

We all felt inspired and proud hearing a foreigner introducing the profound TCM. I have every reason to believe that with more and more international communication, TCM will be accepted globally and benefit more people in the future.

【解析】试题分析：这是一篇给材料作文。题目中给出的材料为几幅图片，故动笔前先要认真观察图片，了解图片所蕴含的信息。写作中应先简单描述一下图片内容，及中医特点的特点把脉，熬中药。然后列出简单提纲，确定句子的时态，句式，关键单词等问题。注意不要遗漏要点，可适当发挥。结合材料可知本文主要是第一人称，时态一般应该用一般过去时。适当使用连词，序数词，注意从句的应用，做到上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。这篇文章对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括，缺一不可。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，一定要契合给出的开头，不能出现文章脱节问题。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。

【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面，结构紧凑，是一篇较好的范文。这篇短文使用了大量的短语，为文章增色不少，如: manage to do设法完成某事，in the future在将来。还使用了定语从句Last month, we took Jack, an American exchange student who fell ill to a traditional Chinese doctor, which turned out to be an eye-widening experience for him.和强调句It was in a math class that I noticed Jack coughing with a runny nose.等多种句式结构，增加了文章的可读性。