Question

假如你叫李华，今年暑假即将跨入高三的学习，压力很大，想和父母说说心里话，请你用英文在你的博客上用书信形式表达出来。主要内容如下：

知心话	感恩	感谢父母的关心、鼓励
对父母的期望	1. 多加交流 2. 适时提供帮助
学习打算	考生自拟（至少写两点）

注意：1. 短文必须包括所有内容要点，可适当发挥。
    2. 词数：120左右（开头与结尾已给出，不计入词数）。

Dear Mom and Dad,

With the Senior Three approaching, I really hope to have a heart-to-heart talk with you!

 

 

 

 

 

Mom and Dad, I am quite confident about my future. Wish you good health and a happy life.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

Dear Mom and Dad,
    With the Senior Three approaching, I really hope to have a heart-to-heart talk with you!
    During the years, I always feel grateful for your unselfish care and love. Thanks to your constant encouragement, I have been making remarkable progress in my studies. 
    Since it will be less than one month before the exam, I'm under great pressure now. I would appreciate it if you can have a frequent talk with me and provide me with timely help,which contributes to my staying in a good state.
    I am fully aware of the responsibilities I am shouldering. I have made up my mind to make every effort to study, for I believe hard work is the key to success.Just as the saying goes,"no pains, no gains." Meanwhile, I will spare some time to participate in sports activities, aiming to build up my body and free myself from the heavy work of studies.
    Mom and Dad, I am quite confident about my future. Wish you good health and a happy life.
                                                                                                                  Yours sincerely,
                                                                                                       Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：本文的属于提纲类写作，要求对父母说说心里话，话题切合考生实际，与考生的生活非常贴近，考生有话可说，有很强的可写性。要点是以提纲的形式给出的，要求考生有较强的整合能力，在写作时充分利用连接词，高级句型和词汇，如果可能在文章结尾运用谚语，以使文章的层次更高。应该用合适的连接词，可以适当使用高级的句式和高级的词汇来给文章增色。在例举学习打算的时候可以加入谚语，让文章更上一层楼。

【亮点说明】范文使用了很多词组：Thanks to 多亏，making remarkable progress 取得很大的进步，made up my mind to 决定，make every effort to study努力学习， the key to…的关键。 还使用了不少精典句式，如： Since it will be less than one month before the exam, I'm under great pressure now. 这句话使用了固定句型，I would appreciate it if you can have a frequent talk with me and provide me with timely help,which contributes to my staying in a good state.这句话使用了it做形式宾语和which引导的定语从句，I am fully aware of the responsibilities I am shouldering.这句话使用了定语从句， Meanwhile, I will spare some time to participate in sports activities, aiming to build up my body and free myself from the heavy work of studies这句话使用了现在分词做状语。文章还恰当地使用了俗语：Just as the saying goes,"no pains, no gains."。

考点: 考查提纲类书面表达