Question

15．阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词的英语短文．
The elephant and the fly
A disciple（信徒），who was disturbed by the fact that his mind was in constant unrest，asked his teacher，"Why are most people's minds restless？What can one do to still the mind？"The teacher looked at the disciple，smiled and told him a story：
 An elephant was standing and picking leaves from a tree．A small fly came，flying and buzzing（嗡嗡叫） near his ear．The elephant waved it away with his long ears．Then the fly came again，and the elephant waved it away once more．
This was repeated several times．Then the elephant asked the fly，"Why are you so restless and noisy？Why can't you stay for a while in one place？"
The fly answered，"I am attracted to whatever I see，hear or smell．My five senses pull me constantly in all directions and I cannot resist them．What is your secret？How can you stay so calm and still？"
The elephant stopped eating and said，"My five senses do not rule my attention．Whatever I do，I get immersed in it．Now that I am eating，I am completely absorbed in eating．In this way I can enjoy my food and chew it better．I rule and control my attention，and not the other way around．"
Upon hearing these words，a smile appeared on the disciple's face，"I understand!If my five senses are in control of my mind and attention，then my mind is in constant unrest．If I am in charge of my five senses and attention，then my mind becomes calm．"
【写作内容】
1．以约30个词概括短文的内容；
2．然后以约120个词就"专注"这一主题发表你的看法，并包括以下要点：
（1）大象和苍蝇的故事给你的启示；
（2）讲述你（或你朋友）因为太多干扰而受到影响的经历；
（3）你认为怎样才能保持专注、专心．
【写作要求】
1．在作文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或者虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2．作文中不得出现真实的姓名和学校名称．
【评分标准】
  概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯．

Answer 1

分析 本文是读写任务型写作，这类作文可按照三段式模板写：第一段：概况所给短文要点．第二段：过渡词引出主题句---阐述理由．第三段：个人观点．特别要注意第一段的概括．用自己的语言概括，不能照搬照抄原文． 时态用一般现在时．人称用第一和第三人称． 重要短语：be absorbed in （全身心地投入于事），stay still（保持安静），obtain calmness（获得冷静），be inspired by（被激励、激发），the ability to do sth（做某事的能力），focus one's attention on…（集中注意力在…），the key to （…的关键），be distracted by sth （被某事分散注意力），achieve success（获得成功），remind sb of…（提醒某人某事），after-class activities（课外活动），be intended for（目的在于），be eager to do sth（渴望做某事），settle down（安顿下来），keep sth up（保持某事），be interfered by（被…干扰），in the end（最后）．
【高分句型一】
1．the disciple realized that only by controlling his senses can he obtain calmness．
此处是宾语从句中使用了部分倒装结构，具体结构为"Only+【状语成分：介词短语/when、if引导的从句/时间副词】+一般疑问句形式"．
【高分句型二】
1．a person①who is easily distracted by the surroundings will feel restless and tired，②unable to achieve his success．
①此处是由关系代词"who"引导的定语从句，先行词为"a person"，关系代词"who"在从句中作主语．
     ②此处是形容词短语作状语，主句为"a person who is easily distracted by the surroundings will feel restless and tired"．
【高分句型三】
2．I have learned a lesson from this experience that one should focus on one thing at a time before he can get it well done．
此处是由连接词"that"引导的同位语从句，解释说明名词"this experience"的具体内容．
【高分句型四】
3．Only when we have a clear and determined mind can we accomplish something in the end．
此处是部分倒装结构，具体结构为"Only+【状语成分：介词短语/when、if引导的从句/时间副词】+一般疑问句形式"．

解答 An elephant told a restless fly that being absorbed in doing things helped him stay still．After hearing the story from his teacher，the disciple realized that only by controlling his senses can he obtain calmness．【高分句型一】（概括）
After reading the story，I was inspired by what the elephant said．The ability to focus your attention is the key to your success in doing anything．Just like the fly，a person who is easily distracted by the surroundings will feel restless and tired，unable to achieve his success．【高分句型二】（启示）
This reminds me of what happened when I entered high school as a Senior One student．I was so excited to find that there were various student organizations and after-class activities intended for us students．It seemed that many groups were suitable to me．During the first term，I was attracted whenever there was a notice from a student group and I was eager to find out more about it．As a result，I didn't spend enough time on my studies，nor could I settle down on my homework every day．Consequently，I failed in an important exam．（经历）
I have learned a lesson from this experience that one should focus on one thing at a time before he can get it well done．【高分句型三】To do so，we should put what we are doing in the first place and keep it up without being interfered by other events．Only when we have a clear and determined mind can we accomplish something in the end．【高分句型四】（个人观点：怎样才能保持专注、专心）

点评 读写任务型写作是将阅读与写作有机结合，要求考生既能读懂文章信息，又要依据要求规范连贯地表达内容，其中准确概括很有挑战且十分重要，根据记叙文、议论文、说明文等不同文体作相应概括，总的来说，遵循以下步骤：确定主题句；寻找关键词；重构主题句；重组支持句．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．