Question

假如你是一名失学儿童，名叫李华，你有幸得到在中国工作的Mr. Brown的资助，可以重返校园。你给Mr. Brown写了一封信，内容如下：
　　★ 收到钱和书后能重返校园，非常感激；
　　★ 在老师的帮助下，学习有了很大的进步，受到老师的表扬和鼓励；
　　★ 决心更加努力学习，取得更大的进步；
　　★ 盼望见到Mr. Brown，希望他寄来一张照片。
注意：1. 书信应包括以上所有要点，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；2. 词数：100左右

Answer 1

Dear Mr. Brown，
　  I am writing to express my deepest gratitude for the money and books you sent me. I could not have returned to school without your help. Thank you so much.
I have been working hard since I went back to school. I have made great progress in my studies with the help of my teachers. They often praise me and encourage me. But for your help, I might have left school and couldn’t have got such a good education. I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress.
How are you getting on with your life and work? I would like to meet you in person, but I have no opportunity to do so. Would you please send me a photo of yourself?
Thank you again for your generous help and best wishes!
Yours Sincerely，
Li Hua　

解析试题分析：考查提纲类书面表达：这是一篇提纲类作文，我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来. 动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题。本作文中给出的要点比较具体,故需要准确表达.写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化。平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果。
【亮点说明】范文中出现一些常见的短语：returned to 返回某处； made great progress取得进步； with the help of 在某人帮助下；made up my mind to下定决心做某事； getting on with与某人相处如何； have no opportunity to do 没有机会做某事。I have been working hard since I went back to school.这句话中考查现在完成时。But for your help, I might have left school and couldn’t have got such a good education.这句话中运用对过去的虚拟语气。I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress这个句子运用两个比较级，前后相互呼应。
考点： 提纲类作文