Question

【题目】假设你是晨光中学的高二年级一班的学生李华。你校拟选拔一批优秀学生，利用暑假到黎明希望小学为学生辅导英语。你希望参加此活动。请根据以下提示，用英语给校评选组写一封申请信。

写作内容：1．对此活动的认识（如对本人、学生及社会的益处等）

2．个人优势（如性格、独立生活能力、语言能力等）

3．你的计划（如怎样进行辅导等）

注意：1．词数100左右；

2．可以适当增加细节，以使内容充实、行文连贯。

参考词汇：黎明希望小学Liming Hope School

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear Sir or Madam,

I am Li Hua from Class One, Senior Two. I heard that some excellent students are wanted to teach pupils English in Liming Hope School during the coming summer vocation and I’m interested in it.

I think highly of this campaign from which not only can participants but the pupils as well, in particular our society get benefits. So I’m dying to participate in it. To begin with, I’m outgoing, which will contribute to getting along well with others. What’s more, I have been independent of my parents since I was young. Thus, it’s out of question for me to live on well on my own. Last but not least, I’m good at English. Taking the above factors into consideration, I can be up to this task well. If I’m lucky enough to get the chance, I’ll spare no effort to help the pupils both in their English study and in their daily life.

Thanks for reading my letter and I would appreciate it if you can give me the chance. Looking forward to your early reply.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】本文是书信类作文，要求用英语给学校写一封申请信，申请用暑期到晨曦希望小学为学生辅导英语。文章的要点也基本上都给出来了，但不是很具体，考生要把要点全交代，不能有遗漏。而且要拓展内容，在写作的过程中，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，如强调句，倒装句等，让文章更上档次。同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，让文章看起来很有条理，也很流畅。本篇文章在写作时不要啰嗦，力求简洁。

【范文亮点】所给范文语言简洁，应用了一些较好的词组和句子：To begin with，开始, What’s more,spare no effort to，不遗余力做某事I think highly of this campaign from which not only can participants but the pupils as well，.这句话用了非限制性定语从句， That’s why I apply for the position.这句话用了表语从句， I would appreciate it if you can give me the chance. 这句话用了虚拟语气。 I heard that some excellent students are wanted to teach pupils English in Liming Hope School 这句话用了宾语从句。文章多处使用复杂句，使阅卷老师眼前一亮。