Question

最近，你看到某英文报社正在征集主题为“如何才能成为受人欢迎的学生”的短文，对此你很感兴趣。请你根据以下提示谈谈自己的想法，给该报社投稿。
要点提示：
1、衣着干净、整齐，保持微笑
2、诚实，乐于助人
3、懂得与人合作
4、其他
注意：
　　①词数120左右；②文章的标题和开头已为你写好，可根据内容要点适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
How to be popular?
　　Most students would like to be popular with their classmates, but what is the secret to achieve popularity?

Answer 1

How to be popular?
　　Most people would like to be popular with others,  but what is the secret to achieve popularity?  In fact, it is very simple.
　　The first step is to improve our appearance. We should always make sure that we dress well and smile warmly.
In this way people will surely be impressed by our confidence. Another important step is to build our character. We should always be honest and willing to help others whenever it is necessary. It’s also important to put others first. If we know how to work and get on well with others, then people will feel comfortable enough to trust us.
　　I am sure we’ll be popular with others if we can do all of the above.

试题分析：本文是一篇提纲类作文，请你以主题为“如何才能成为受人欢迎的学生”的短文向报社投稿。题目中给出了提纲，但是具体的要点要考生自己发挥，这就增加了难度，要结合提纲列出要点内容，再用适当的语言把要点表达出来，写作的时候要把所有的提纲都包括在内，不要遗漏。同时注意使用被动语态，倒装句等不同的句式，让文章充满变化，不要那么的死板。同时要使用高级的词汇和词组提高文章的档次。
【亮点说明】The first step is to improve our appearance. 这句话是不定式做表语，We should always make sure that we dress well and smile warmly. 这句话用了make sure和that引导的宾语从句， In this way people will surely be impressed by our confidence. 这句话用了词组be impressed by， We should always be honest and willing to help others whenever it is necessary.这句话个了不定式做定语和让步状语从句， It’s also important to put others first. 这句话用了it做形式主语，If we know how to work and get on well with others, then people will feel comfortable enough to trust us. 这句话用了条件状语从句，不定式。