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3．假定你是Jane，你的笔友李华最近因为考试密集、学业繁重，身体感到不适，严重影响了学习．因此，他发e-mail给你，寻求你的建议和帮助．请你根据以下要点提示予以回复．
写作要点：1．合理的饮食； 2．适度的锻炼；3…
注意：1．词数80左右
 2．开头和结尾部分已写好，不计入总词数．
 3．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
Dear Li Hua，
I'm sorry to hear that you are feeling ill these days．
                                                                                       
Best wishes!
                                                             Jane．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，写一封书信，给笔友李华提一些学习生活上的建议．写作要点包括：1．合理的饮食； 2．适度的锻炼；3…．写作时人称以第一和第三人称为主，时态以一般现在时为主．
重要短语：stay healthy （保持健康）；neglect（忽视）；a balanced diet（平衡的饮食）；take morning exercise （晨练）；stay up （熬夜）；
高分句型：1．First，have three meals a day and never neglect your breakfast．Keep a balanced diet．
                  运用祈使句给对方提出建议，强调平衡饮食的重要性．
                  2．You can do some sports ①to refresh yourself②if weather permits．
                  ①不定式短语表示目的，说明为什么要进行体育锻炼；②if引导一个条件状语从句．

解答 Dear Jane，
    I'm sorry to hear that you are feeling ill these days．In your letter you asked me how to stay healthy and keep attentive in class．Here is my advice．
First，have three meals a day and never neglect your breakfast．Keep a balanced diet．（高分句型一）Second，taking morning exercise every day is a nice choice．As you know，daily exercise helps build a strong body．You can do some sports to refresh yourself if weather permits．（高分句型二）Finally，don't stay up to make sure you have a good sleep every night．
    I think it would be beneficial if you could follow my suggestions．Hope you'll feel well soon．
Best wishes．
                                                                  Jane

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时要注意：要点的提炼要全；关键短语和句型要写对，准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，还要注意人称和时态使用要正确．尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．