Question

11．假设你是红星中学高三（1）班的学生李华．下面四幅图描述了你们带留学生Jack看中医（TCM）的经历．请你根据图片的先后顺序，为校刊"英语角"写一篇短文，介绍你们带Jack看医生前后的全过程．
注意：词数不少于60．
提示词：把脉 feel one's pulse

Answer 1

分析 写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，2、要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
（高分句型一）It was in a math class that I noticed Jack coughing with a runny nose．Everyone looked at him with concern．
该句使用了It was in a math class that…强调句，强调状语in a math class；
（高分句型二）Seeing this，one classmate and I offered to take him to the TCM department．
该句使用了现在分词seeing做状语，see和主句的主语one classmate and I是主动关系，故用现在分词；
高分句型三）I have every reason to believe that with more and more international communication，TCM will be accepted globally and benefit more people in the future．
该句使用了will be accepted的被动语态；

解答 Last month，we took Jack，an American exchange student who fell ill to a traditional Chinese doctor，which turned out to be an eye-widening experience for him．
     （高分句型一）It was in a math class that I noticed Jack coughing with a runny nose．Everyone looked at him with concern．（高分句型二）Seeing this，one classmate and I offered to take him to the TCM department．He hesitated but followed．At the clinic，the doctor first looked at Jack for a while before feeling his pulse and checking his tongue．The doctor then asked if the cough had been on and off for a long time．In great surprise，Jack nodded his head．The doctor then wrote a prescription with instructions on how to take the medicine．
     After boiling the herb medicine at home，I brought it to him in his dormitory．The first taste almost made him throw up．It was really too hard even for me．I comforted him with an old saying"Good medicine to the health tastes bitter to the mouth"．Jack managed to swallow the medicine with a frown．But after a week，when he recovered，he felt amazed at the effect of the Chinese medicine．At a class meeting about the deepest impressions about China，Jack chose"TCM in My Eyes"as the topic．He shared his experience of TCM，from doubt at first to belief in the end．
     We all felt inspired and proud hearing a foreigner introducing the profound TCM．（高分句型三）I have every reason to believe that with more and more international communication，TCM will be accepted globally and benefit more people in the future．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．