Question

18．假设你是李华，你购买了一台联想牌笔记本电脑（Lenovo Y480TFI ），因有质量问题
要求该公司为你更换一台新电脑．请你根据下列要点，用英文写一封电子邮件．
要点：1．问题：电脑启动后噪音过大，出现自动关机现象；  型号新，无备件，无法维修；
该产品在购买点已售完，至少三个月才能更换；
 2．要求：公司尽快予以更换．
注意：1．词数100左右；
  2．电子邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好，不计人总词数．
参考词汇：备件spare parts        最新型号 the latest model．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息用英文写一封电子邮件，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：分别从问题和要求两个方面来讨论该话题 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：First of all首先；To make matters worse更糟是；As a consequence结果是；
I had no choice but to take it to the seller，but was informed that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one．（高分句型一）
   I would appreciate it very much if you could take my request into consideration．（高分句型二）

解答 Dear Sir，
     I am writing to you for the laptop of Lenovo Y480 TFT I bought on 20^th September 2015 at Suning in Wuhan．
     Ten days after I bought it，it didn't work well as expected．First of all，a loud noise appeared after it ran． To make matters worse，sometimes it shut off by itself．I had no choice but to take it to the seller，but was informed that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one．（高分句型一）Later I could not help but turn to a repairman．He explained to me that since it was the latest model in China，it was almost impossible to fix it without the right spare parts．I was so desperate on hearing that．I also can't tolerate the thought of waiting such a long time．As a consequence，I require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month．
     I would appreciate it very much if you could take my request into consideration．（高分句型二）An early reply at your convenience is expected．
                                                       Sincerely yours，
                                                       Li   Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．