Question

上周你班同学展开了一场讨论。主题是Wealth and Health，请你根据以下提供的信息，介绍一下你们讨论的情况。
一些同学认为财富更重要，如：没有钱万万不行；想办法多赚钱等；
一些同学认为健康更重要，如：健康是本钱；要爱惜身体；
个人看法：更看重健康，身体不好，钱再多也无济于事。
注意：1. 词数100左右；
2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
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Answer 1

Last week, we had a discussion about “Wealth and Health”. Different people have different opinions.
　　Some people prefer wealth, holding that money can not bring everything, but without it, one can do nothing. However, other people regard health as more important. Once health is lost, it is no use having a lot of money.
　　As far as I am concerned, I love wealth, but I value health more. Everybody wants to live a happy life. So we try our best to earn money which can ensure we lead a comfortable life, but if happiness and comfort are achieved at the cost of their health, how can we be happy? Without health money becomes meaningless. So just do our best to keep healthy.

试题分析：本文属于陈述正反方观点的议论文作文，主题是Wealth and Health，给出了大部分要点，就是对健康和财富的不同观点，要考生给出自己的观点。文章结构清晰，先是一些同学认为财富更重要的观点，然后是认为健康更重要的观点，最后是自己的观点，要求考生用地道的英语表达自己的观点，要求观点明确，驾驭语言的能力强，选择词汇的时候要选择相对高级的词汇，也要运用多种句型，让文章更有变化。难度在于选择合适的词汇和句型表达文章需要的意思，可以变换使用一些容易驾驭的句子或者词汇实现同样的目的。在写作的时候要运用合适的连接词把要点串联起来，使文章成为一个整体。
点评：本文属于正反方观点作文，但是要点给出的不算多，需要考生自己添加部分。在分析部分已经详细说明了。在写作的时候要适合合适的连接词来连接各要点，使他们成为整体。要选择高级的词汇和句型，让文章有变化，有层次。