Question

17．假设你是高三学生李津，你的加拿大笔友Daniel来信向你求助．他最近和妈妈闹矛盾，因为妈妈不让他过多上网．他对此很不理解．请你给他写一封回信，要点如下：
（1）建议他向妈妈道歉；
（2）说明过多上网的危害；
（3）列举一些健康的休闲方式．
注意：（1）词数不少于100；
（2）可适当加入细节，使内容充实，行文连贯；
（3）开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
Dear Daniel，
I'm very sorry to hear that a conflict occurred between you and your mother because of your Internet addiction．′In my opinion，you should apologize to your mother，as she has done nothing wrong to prevent you from Internet addiction．（向妈妈道歉） Although the Internet plays an important role in modern life，we can't ignore its harm to us．Many students spend most of their time playing computer games or chatting aimlessly with others，which may not only result in poor health but also lead to decline in study as well as loss of communication in the real world．（高分句型一）（上网的危害）
As students，we should devote our energy to study，when available，you may as well walk outside with your friends or take some exercise to keep fit instead of playing online games．（高分句型二）Only in this way can you live and study happily and healthily．（高分句型三）（健康的生活方式）

Yours，
Li Jin．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息给李津写一封回信，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：（1）建议他向妈妈道歉；（2）说明过多上网的危害；（3）列举一些健康的休闲方式． 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：In my opinion以我的观点来看；prevent…from 阻止…免受；play an important role in在…方面起重要作用；result in导致；keep fit 保持健康；as well as也，还
      Many students spend most of their time playing computer games or chatting aimlessly with others，which may not only result in poor health but also lead to decline in study as well as loss of communication in the real world．（高分句型一）
         As students，we should devote our energy to study，when available，you may as well walk outside with your friends or take some exercise to keep fit instead of playing online games．（高分句型二）
       Only in this way can you live and study happily and healthily．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Daniel，
     I'm very sorry to hear that a conflict occurred between you and your mother because of your Internet addiction．
     In my opinion，you should apologize to your mother，as she has done nothing wrong to prevent you from Internet addiction．（向妈妈道歉） Although the Internet plays an important role in modern life，we can't ignore its harm to us．Many students spend most of their time playing computer games or chatting aimlessly with others，which may not only result in poor health but also lead to decline in study as well as loss of communication in the real world．（高分句型一）（上网的危害）
     As students，we should devote our energy to study，when available，you may as well walk outside with your friends or take some exercise to keep fit instead of playing online games．（高分句型二）Only in this way can you live and study happily and healthily．（高分句型三）（健康的生活方式）
                                                                                                                                                                                                    Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                      Li Jin

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．