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11．假设你是红星中学高中学生李华，最近，你校学生会对影响学生课外阅读的因素进行了调查，结果见下图．请根据图示提供的信息给某英文报纸写信，反映调查的实际情况，并寻求建议．
注意：
1．信的开头已为你写好．
2．词数不少于60．
Dear Editor，
Our student union has recently conducted a survey on what may affect students outside-class reading．
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Sincerely yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于图表类作文，根据提示信息讨论影响学生课外阅读的因素，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：分别从图书馆开放时间，课业负担重，书价格高，家长不支持几个方面来讨论该话题 2、图表是文章的总体框架，要在图表的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：conduct a survey 进行调查as follows 如下take up 占据be satisfied with…对…满意given…考虑到

解答 Dear Editor，
Our student union has recently conducted a survey on what affects students'after-class reading．The result is as follows：
72% of the students think that schoolwork takes up most of their time，leaving very little time for after-class reading．（高分句型） Meanwhile，16% complain that their parents do not support them enough．Parents are concerned that their children's attention may be taken away by the non-school related reading．（高分句型）
Besides，8% of the students are not satisfied with the opening hour of the library and the limited book collections there．And 4% of the students think books are too expensive nowadays，so they can't afford to read as much as they want．（高分句型）
We all know that reading is beneficial．However，given the facts above，how can we read more？I would appreciate your advice very much on how to encourage our reading．（高分句型）
Sincerely yours，
Li Hua

点评 应该注意适当增加细节以使行文连贯，比如适当选用表示因果、递进、转折关系的连接词，使文章流畅、通顺，并避免因反复使用句式相同的简单句而造成的单调感．（1）认真审题，确定体裁． （2）构思要点．根据题目要求，理解要表达的要点．设计好文章的层次段落，考虑所用时态、人称等，把要点串联起来，构成文章框架．（3）选词造句，避难选易．（4）认真检查，避免错误．仔细阅读全文，查找是否有错，注意时态、单词拼写、字母大小写、标点是否有误，句式是否正确．逻辑是否一致．