Question

【题目】《英语双语报》有一个Star Student栏目。请你根据下表信息，以Yang Yongde—a star student为题向该栏目投稿，写一篇100字左右的短文介绍你校品学兼优的高三毕业生杨弘德同学。

姓名	杨弘德	年龄	19
考入学校	香港中文大学	奖学金	50万港元
家庭情况	父亲死于车祸，母亲重病卧床
本人情况	持家、照顾母亲、学习刻苦、成绩突出、乐于助人
你的评价	……

要求：1. 文章必须包括表中信息，可适当增加细节，使文章连贯。

2. 参考词汇：香港中文大学Hong Kong Chinese University; 奖学金scholarship; 港元HK dollars

3. 开头已为你写好，不计入总词数。

Yang Yongde—a star student

In this year’s college entrance examination of Shandong, Yang Yongde, a senior 3 student from our school,

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Answer 1

【答案】Yang Yongde—a star student

In this year’s college entrance examination of Shandong, Yang Yongde, a senior 3 student from our school, got a high mark and was admitted to Hong Kong Chinese University, with a scholarship of HK $500,000.

But three years ago when Yang, aged 16, just began his senior 1 school life, his father was killed in a traffic accident. His mother became seriously ill in bed because of his father’s death, losing the basic ability to support herself.

Thus Yang had to take the burden of supporting the family and nursing his ill mother. He overcame difficulty after difficulty that he faced. Meanwhile he studied even harder and did pretty well in all his subjects. Moreover, he is always ready to help others.

Yang Yongde has set us a shining example both in daily life and study, from whom we should learn.

【解析】这是一篇投稿文，文章内容已经列出，在写作文时应注意以下几点：

1.通篇应用一般过去式。

2.要点应齐全，但不可对要点进行简单罗列，要用适当的连词使全文流畅，衔接自然。

3.注意语气。写作难点在家庭情况上，应尽量真实详细，不可简单罗列并且一定要通过简单的例子来支撑，否则会显得说服力不够，内容不够丰满。这部分可以采取简单句与复合句结合的办法。

【范文亮点】：

采用伴随状语（ His mother became seriously ill in bed because of his father’s death, losing the basic ability to support herself.）等高级句式。

2采用 thus， because of，meanwhile，moreover等连词，使文章连贯顺畅。

3结尾语气自然，符合栏目投稿文章结尾要求。