Question

10．请根据以下提示，并结合具体事例，用英语写一篇短文．
Failure is annoying，but what failure can teach us may never be taught in other ways．
注意：①无须写标题；
②除诗歌外，文体不限；
③内容必须结合你生活中的具体事例；
④文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；
⑤词数不少于120，如引用提示语则不计入总词数．

Answer 1

分析 失败是令人厌烦的，但是失败对我们的教育意义是无法替代的．根据提示，并结合具体事例，用英语写一篇短文．无须写标题；除诗歌外，文体不限；内容必须结合你生活中的具体事例；文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；词数不少于120，如引用提示语则不计入总词数．不要出现标点和拼写错误，尽量保持卷面整洁，字体美观，注意行文的连贯性．
亮点说明：范文中对于英文提示换了一种表达方式，但是达到了同样的效果．failure can usually help us learn what our strengths and weaknesses are．多种形式表达同一种意思，避免重复，符合题目要求，可以使文章变化多样，避免单调乏味，更重要的是起到启下的作用；范文中使用了较多的语法知识，原因状语从句as failure can usually help us learn what our strengths and weaknesses are，时间状语从句When I was in Junior High School，动作分词做状语saying that it promised a better future，定语从句the fact that I was not good at Physics，强调句It was only two months later that I realized my talent lay in subjects like Chinese．原因状语从句、时间状语从句、动作分词做状语、定语从句、强调句等语法的使用提升了文章的档次，同时也显示较高的语法知识点使用能力；范文中注意使用了extremely，immediately等副词，switched，witness等动词，显示了丰富的词汇量，表意更精准，提升了文章的档次；范文中使用了一些固定短语：promise a better future，follow this trend，be good at，lay in等，丰富了文章的内容，使文章更加充实完整．
     No one can ever achieve any success without failure，as failure can usually help us learn what our strengths and weaknesses are．（高分句型一）
    When I was in Junior High School，most of my teachers and students thought it better to study science，saying that it promised a better future．（高分句型二）
    It was only two months later，when I failed an extremely important Physics exam，that I realized my talent lay in subjects like Chinese，English as well as History．（高分句型三）

解答 No one can ever achieve any success without failure，as failure can usually help us learn what our strengths and weaknesses are．（高分句型一）
      When I was in Junior High School，most of my teachers and students thought it better to study science，saying that it promised a better future．（高分句型二）I tried to follow this trend despite the fact that I was not good at Physics．It was only two months later，when I failed an extremely important Physics exam，that I realized my talent lay in subjects like Chinese，English as well as History．（高分句型三）I switched for arts immediately．
      The following years witnessed my excellent school performance then．So failure is not as terrible as we have expected as long as we can learn something from it．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．