Question

【题目】假如你是李华，你们学校最近开展了创建“平安校园”活动。你们班为此要组织一次主题班会，请你用英语写一篇发言稿，谈一谈你对创建“平安校园”的一些想法。短文应该包括下面的内容：

1．安全意识的重要性；

2．在校内要注意人身安全；

3．运动时要注意安全；

4．同学之间发生矛盾时，一定要保持冷静、理智。

注意： 1.词数100左右；

2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3．文章开头已给出，不计入总词数。

Safety at School

My dear classmates,

There is no denying that safety plays an important part in our daily life. Recently our school has carried out a program aimed at making our campus a safe place to stay on.

Answer 1

【答案】

My dear classmates,

There is no denying that safety plays an important part in our daily life. Recently our school has carried out a program aimed at making our campus a safe place to stay on.

I consider this as indeed a good practice, which will make us aware that safety should always come first in our daily life, whether when we stay at school or outside it. When we are doing sports, we should attach importance to the safety and avoid being hurt. Furthermore, when we get into trouble with our classmates, we should remain calm and avoid any form of fighting, which may only bring suffering and pain to us mentally and physically.

As far as I'm concerned, I feel all the students and teachers should work hard and creatively to keep the "safety at school" activity in mind. Besides, we are supposed to observe the law discipline where we are at any moment.

【解析】

试题分析：假如你是李华，你们学校最近开展了创建“平安校园”活动。你们班为此要组织一次主题班会，请你用英语写一篇发言稿，谈一谈你对创建“平安校园”的一些想法。短文应该包括下面的内容：1．安全意识的重要性；2．在校内要注意人身安全；3．运动时要注意安全；4．同学之间发生矛盾时，一定要保持冷静、理智。写作时不要逐句翻译，可适当增加细节以使行文连贯.要把所提示的点写全，语句通顺，同时要注意准确运用时态、语态、上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。根据句意适当使用并列连词，同时也要合理运用高级词汇和高级句子为文章增色添彩。注意： 1.词数100左右；2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3．文章开头已给出，不计入总词数。

【亮点说明】There is no denying that safety plays an important part in our daily life.there be句型和同位语从句的结合；I consider this as indeed a good practice, which will make us aware that safety should always come first in our daily life, whether when we stay at school or outside it.非限制性定语从句、宾语从句和whether--- or引导的让步状语从句完美结合；When we are doing sports, we should attach importance to the safety and avoid being hurt.句中使用了时间状语从句；Furthermore, when we get into trouble with our classmates, we should remain calm and avoid any form of fighting, which may only bring suffering and pain to us mentally and physically.时间状语从句和非限制性定语从句在同一句中出现，另外Furthermore的运用也很到位；As far as I'm concerned, I feel all the students and teachers should work hard and creatively to keep the "safety at school" activity in mind.运用了As far as I'm concerned,这样的方式状语从句；Besides, we are supposed to observe the law discipline where we are at any moment.运用了where引导的定语从句。