Question

13．假设你是李华，刚刚参加了在London为中学生举行的为期一周的关于各国传统文化交流的冬令营活动，请你给组织者Mr．Black 写一封邮件表达感谢之意，并请他帮忙寄回你忘记带回的数码相机．
要点如下：1、对交流活动的感受．2、有关相机的信息及其重要性．3、表示感谢．
注意：
1、词数100左右；
2、可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
Dear Mr．Black，
I am Li HuaI am writing to convey my deep gratitude for the winter camp you organized for us teenagers，which is really beneficial to us．During the one-week activity，not only did I broaden my horizon to get familiar with traditional culture of different countries but I made so many foreign friends as well．I had a wonderful time there．
By the way，would you please do me a favor？Because of my carelessness，I left my digital camera in the Room 201 of the hotel where we lived．It contains all the valuable photos I took during the activity，which mean a lot to me．If you could find it，would you please post it to me and I will pay for the postage．
I'd appreciate it if you could assist me to get my precious camera back．Thank you very much．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 写好这类作文要注意几个步骤：1． 认真审题，找准提示语中的关键词或句，确定中心思想．2． 依据关键句，草拟提纲，梳理文章的脉络3． 准确定位人称、时态．注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．4．最后还要认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等
高分句型一：
I am writing to convey my deep gratitude for the winter camp you organized for us teenagers，which is really beneficial to us
我想表达我深深的感谢你为我们组织青少年冬令营，这真是对我们有益．
高分句型二：
If you could find it，would you please post it to me and I will pay for the postage．
如果你能找到它，请把它给我，我会付邮费．

解答 Dear Mr．Black，
I am Li Hua．I am writing to convey my deep gratitude for the winter camp you organized for us teenagers，which is really beneficial to us（高分句型一）．During the one-week activity，not only did I broaden my horizon to get familiar with traditional culture of different countries but I made so many foreign friends as well．I had a wonderful time there．
By the way，would you please do me a favor？Because of my carelessness，I left my digital camera in the Room 201 of the hotel where we lived．It contains all the valuable photos I took during the activity，which mean a lot to me．If you could find it，would you please post it to me and I will pay for the postage（高分句型二）．
I'd appreciate it if you could assist me to get my precious camera back．Thank you very much．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua

点评 开放性作文给出一定的写作主题，并此为基础进行思维和联想，自由发挥．不仅考查学生在内容、结构安排、语言运用和组织方面的能力，而且对学生的想像力、发散思维、归纳判断能力也有很高的要求．