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10．母爱悄深，母爱无价；学会感恩，学会回报．某英语网站举办以"My mother"为题的英语征文活动．请你根据下列思维导图提供的信息，写一篇短文，介绍自己的母亲和你们的真情故事．
提示：1．短文应包括导图中的全部信息，条理清楚，行文连贯，段落分明；
2．短文中不能出现真实的人名和地名．
3．词数不少于80，开头已给出：不计人总词数．

My mother
We need love．Wealso need to love．The person I love most is my mother．My mother is 41 years old．She is of medium build with longblack hair．Shi is quiet．She is a history teacher in a middle school．Shelikes dancing．She can cook delicious food．
She did a lotfor me when I was a child．She bought whatever I needed for my study，eventhough she didn't have much money．She sent me from piano lessons to dancinglessons at the weekend．She cooked delicious and healthy food for me．
When I grow up，I will do what I can to make my mother happy．I will find a good job after Igraduate from college．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make herlook still young．I'll take her to wonderful sights around China．Most importa ntly，I will stay with her when I have free time．That's what shewants most，I think．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是以"My mother"为题介绍自己的母亲和你们的真情故事．时态主要为一般现在时和一般过去时．人称主要为第一人称和第三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1介绍：年龄，工作，外貌，能力，爱好
2她为我做的事
3我将会为她做什么
常用到的重点短语：
even though即使
grow up 长大
make sb+adj使某人怎么样
like doing sth喜欢做某事
cook…for sb为某人做…
graduate from…从…毕业
高分句型：
1．She bought ①whatever I needed for my study，②even though she didn't have much money．
①whatever无论什么．引导的宾语从句，作为buy的宾语．
②even though引导的让步状语从句．
2．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young．
that make her look still young是一定语从句，修饰先行词clothes，关系词that作为定语从句的主语，不可省略．

解答 My mother
We need love．We also need to love．The person I love most is my mother．The person I love most is my mother．My mother is 41 years old．She is of medium build with long black hair．Shi is quiet．She is a history teacher in a middle school．She likes dancing．She can cook delicious food．（介绍）
She did a lot for me when I was a child．She bought whatever I needed for my study，even though she didn't have much money．（高分句型）She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend．She cooked delicious and healthy food for me．（她为我做的事）
When I grow up，I will do what I can to make my mother happy．I will find a good job after I graduate from college．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young．（高分句型）I'll take her to wonderful sights around China．Most importantly，I will stay with her when I have free time．That's what she wants most，I think．（我将会为她做什么）

点评 本题是一篇图表作文，图表作为书面表达的一种信息提示方式，比提纲作文线索显得更简洁明了，写作时也容易区分表达，本题在写作时，要特别注意几种情况的描述，不能逐句翻译，同时要根据提示有效灵活的构思，恰当使用逻辑词语，让文章显得有条理，不杂乱．