Question

6．老师向同学们介绍了2013年度“最美孝心少年”的感人事迹，你深受感动．请你用英语写一则日记，写出自己的感受．
内容要点及要求：
表明自己将向“孝心少年”学习；
你将在日常生活、学习中做些什么来孝敬父母；．词数：80左右．开头部分已给出，不计入总词数．
提示词（可选用）：learn from，respect，care for，do some housework，study hard
Monday，June 30                                                         Sunny
This morning，our English teacher told us some stories about“the most beautiful filial piety youth in 2013”．I was deeplymoved．Those teenagers set us a good example in respecting and caring forparents．
Iused to make my parents unhappy and now I feel ashamed about it．I think Ishould learn from them．I will help do some housework and take good care of mymum and dad when they are ill．I will try my best to study hard so that I canenter the key high school in our city．I hope I can become a filial piety youthlike them．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．本文已经给出了主要写作要点：在日常生活、学习中做些什么来孝敬父母．本文主要是第一人称，时态较为复杂，注意时态一致问题．语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯．适当使用连词，做到上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系．
重要短语和句型：
learn from    从…学习…；
help do some housework 帮着做家务；
take good care of 好好照顾；
Our English teacher told us some stories about“the most beautiful filial pietyyouth in 2013”．
我们的英语老师告诉我们一些关于2013年度“最美孝心少年”的感人事迹．
Those teenagers set us a good example in respecting and caring forparents．
那些少年为我们树立了尊重和关心父母好的榜样．
I used to make my parents unhappy and now I feel ashamed about it．
我过去常常使我的父母不高兴，现在我感到羞耻．
I will try my best to study hard so that I can enter the key high school in our city．
我将尽我所能努力学习，这样我就可以进入我们城市的重点高中．

解答 Monday，June 30                                                        Sunny
  This morning，our English teacher told us some stories about“the most beautiful filial piety youth in 2013”．I was deeplymoved．Those teenagers set us a good example in respecting and caring forparents．【引出话题】
  I used to make my parents unhappy and now I feel ashamed about it．I think I should learn from them．I will help do some housework and take good care of my mum and dad when they are ill．I will try my best to study hard so that I can enter the key high school in our city．I hope I can become a filial piety youth like them．【在日常生活、学习中如何孝敬父母】

点评 这篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短语，为文章增色不少．如：set an example for为…树立榜样；used to do sth．过去常常做某事；take care of照顾；try one's best to do sth．尽力做某事；强调句式It is said for sb．to do sth．做某事对某人来说怎么样等等．学习中注意总结，牢记一些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，让文章更出彩．