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19．如今，在我们身边，父母均在外打工的留守儿童比比皆是．关注留守儿童（left-behind children），构建和谐社会的重要内容．关注留守儿童，要靠全社会的共同努力．你认为留守童面临的主要问题有那些？为了解决留守儿童的问题，请你向当地政府提建议：提示：1）缺乏父母的关爱（be short of love），性格孤僻（lonely），学习压力大、自卑．2）缺乏安全保障，缺乏 家庭关爱（families'care），容易犯错误甚至犯罪（do some thing against the laws）．
建议：1）学校建立留守儿童 心里咨询室（Psychological Counseling Room），老师应该把爱播撒到每一个留守儿童的心田．2）政府利用节假日建立 留守儿童家长学校（ parents'school for these children）． 3）社会各界开展与留守儿童 一帮一结对子的活动（hand-in-hand activity）．4）父母尽可能回到孩子身边，给孩子生活上和学习上的帮助和关爱．
表达要求：语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁、字数不少于80个．
Dear Mayor：
I'm a middle school student．I'm writing to tell you something around us．Nowadays，there are many-left-behind children whose parents work away from their hometowns．Most of them are from the countryside，you know，they have many problem．They are always lonely and stressed out because they are short of their parents'love．At the same time，they are easy to make mistakes even do some thing against the laws，because they're short of their families'care．
How to solve their problems？In my opinion，school should set up PsychologicalCounselingRoom andthe teacher should put love into every left-behind children's heart． The government can set up a parents school for these children on holidays，you can organize"hand-in-hand"activity to call on more people to help them．You can also raise money to donate to these children．As the song says："If everyone gives their love，the world will be better．"It's very important for us to pay more attention to these children if we want to build a harmonious society． Above all，the parentsare supposed togo back to be with their children to give help and care to them as possible as they can．Best wishes to you!．

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分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是谈谈留守童面临的主要问题并向当地政府提建议．注意信件的格式．时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
一、主要问题1．缺乏父母的关爱，性格孤僻，学习压力大、自卑． 
               2．缺乏安全保障（缺乏家庭关爱，容易犯错误甚至犯罪）． 
二、建议：1．学校建立留守儿童心理咨询室，老师应该把爱播撒到每一个留守儿童的心田． 
                2．政府利用节假日建立留守儿童家长学校． 
                3．社会各界开展与留守儿童一帮一的结对活动．
                4．父母尽可能回到孩子身边，给孩子生活上和学习上的帮助和关爱．
常用到的重点短语：
stress out 压力大
be short of 缺乏
make mistakes 犯错误
set up 建立
pay attention to 关注
above all最重要的
as possible as sb can尽可能地
【高分句型】
1．Nowadays，①there are many-left-behind children ②whose parents work③away from their hometowns．
①there be句型，表示存在
②whose是关系词，作为定语从句的定语，修饰先行词children．
③away from 远离
2．①It's very important for us to②pay more attention to these children ③if we want to build a harmonious society．
①it is+adj+for sb+to do sth对某人来说做某事是怎么样的，it是形式主语，动词不定式做真正主语．
②pay attention to 关注
③if 引导的条件状语从句．

解答 Dear Mayor，
I'm a middle school student．I'm writing to tell you something around us． Nowadays，there are many-left-behind children whose parents work away from their hometowns．【高分句型】Most of them are from the countryside，you know，they have many problem．They are always lonely and stressed out because they are short of their parents'love．（缺乏父母的关爱，性格孤僻，学习压力大、自卑）At the same time，they are easy to make mistakes even do some thing against the laws，because they're short of their families'care．（缺乏安全保障）
How to solve their problems？In my opinion，schools should set up Psychological Counseling Room and the teachers  should put love into every left-behind children's heart．  （学校建立留守儿童心理咨询室，老师应该把爱播撒到每一个留守儿童的心田．）The government can set up a parents school for these children on holidays，you can organize"hand-in-hand"activity to call on more people to help them．You can also raise money to donate to these children．As the song says："If everyone gives their love，the world will be better．"It's very important for us to pay more attention to these children if we want to build a harmonious society．（政府利用节假日建立留守儿童家长学校，社会各界开展与留守儿童一帮一的结对活动）【高分句型】Above all，the parents are supposed to go back to be with their children to give help and care to them as possible as they can．（父母尽可能回到孩子身边，给孩子生活上和学习上的帮助和关爱）
Best wishes to you!

点评 这是一篇给材料作文，本文已经给出了主要写作要点，动笔前要先认真阅读要点，然后围绕要点适当发挥．写作中，应注意描述的全面性，尽量将提示的内容利用上．语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯．适当使用连词，做到上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系．