Question

每个人都拥有梦想，而实现梦想需要行动。请你根据所给图片写一篇题为“Take action to realize our dreams”的英语短文。你的短文应包括以下内容:
(1) 描述图片内容，如情景、人物(Frank)、动作等；并简要表达你的观点；
(2) 谈谈你的梦想，及如何实现。

注意：
(1) 词数90左右，短文首段已经给出，不计入总词数；
(2) 文中不得提及考生所在学校及自己的姓名。
Take action to realize our dreams
All of ue have dreams, but how can we realize our dreams?
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               

Answer 1

Take action to realize our dreams
All of us have dreams, but how can we realize our dreams?
From the pictures, we know that Frank dreamed to become a doctor when he was 15 years old. However, 45 years later he still dreams to be a doctor lying in bed. It is clear that he lives in the dream without any actions. It is clear that he lives in the dream without any actions I also have a dream. I wish to work as an engineer when I grow up. I will study hard every day and improve my abilities to get ready for my future job, so that I can make my dream come true. 

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们根据图片，写一篇命题作文，题目为Take action to realize our dreams。为实现梦想而采取行动。通过审题可知，这篇作文应主要有两个方面的内容，一是要把图片中的人物、事件表达清楚，并且有自己对这件事情的看法。所以这就要求我们要仔细观察图片，弄清楚图片主要想告诉我们什么，并用英语表达出来；另一方面是谈谈自己的梦想，以及如何实现梦想，这一部分是开放性的，可自由发挥。写好这篇作文的关键是要体现文章的中心，即想要实现梦想，必须要行动起来，空想是不行的。写作时要注意语意连贯，表达流畅。
【亮点说明】这是一篇比较优秀的作文。这篇作文的结构主要分为三个部分。开头用一句话提出了问题，这是题目中给好的开头，我们要顺着这个话题向下说；第二部分描写了图片中的内容，表达很准确，很切题，说出了关键所在；第三部分表达了自己的梦想，以及如何实现这个梦想。整个文章的意思还是很连贯的，表达的也比较流畅。有简单句，也有复合句。文章中的好的句型有we know that Frank dreamed to become a doctor when he was 15 years old、It is clear that he lives in the dream without any actions、It is clear that he lives in the dream without any actions、I will study hard every day and improve my abilities to get ready for my future job, so that I can make my dream come true.等。