Question

假设你叫Mark，你过了一个非常开心和健康的暑假，你去看望了你的外公外婆，和爸爸一起去爬山，常常帮助妈妈干家务，几乎没有上网打游戏，有时候和家人一起看电视，比如中国达人秀“China’s Got Talent”，你还经常和你的朋友锻炼身体......字数:(70词左右)。
参考词汇：visit，go to mountains, hardly ever, exercise...

Answer 1

I am Li Hua. I had a very happy and healthy summer vacation. At the beginning of the vacation, I visited my grandparents who live in the countryside. I went to mountains with my father for several times. It helped me to be stronger and healthier. At home, I often helped mother do housework. I never played computer games. I spent time watching TV with my family. We all like the show “China’s Got Talent”, which is very popular in China. I also exercised with my friends sometimes.

试题分析：这是篇给材料作文。材料中已经包括了写作的要点，在写作时不要遗漏。在陈述的时候注意句子的完整性和正确性，句子之间要逻辑清晰。写作时，注意要用第一人称，用一般过去式。所以尤其要注意动词的形式。
【亮点分析】
这篇文章紧扣材料，要点齐全，表述通顺流畅。文中用到了很多短语，例如：At the beginning of the vacation,在假期开始；go to mountains爬山；for several times几次；help sb. do sth.帮助某人做…..;等等。文章里也有些复杂的长句，例如：At the beginning of the vacation, I visited my grandparents who live in the countryside.在假期的开始，我去看忘了爷爷奶奶，他们住在乡下。Who引导了一个定语从句。We all like the show “China’s Got Talent”, which is very popular in China.我们都喜欢中国达人秀这个节目，它在中国很流行。Which引导了非限制性定语从句。