Question

请写一篇文章介绍你这几年来的变化，包括学习英语的方法，外型，性格，喜好，害怕的东西，生活方式这几个方面的变化。文章开头已给出。可能用到的单词.(by doing ,used to, shy,  long hair,  hate, rules, be afraid of, _changed_  ……)
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       

Answer 1

When  I was a junior high school student, I was a short and fat girl.I was shy and afraid of being laughed by others.so I used to stay in the classroom instead of playing with classmates after class. I only like playing computer games at home. My English was very poor,because I hated English .
Later ,a girl with long haircame to my class,and she changed my life.She made friend with me. She asked me to excercise with her.She helped me with my English by encouraging me to read English aloud ,to talk to her with English.
Now，when I am a junior high school student and I am a confidient and outgoing gril . I have changed so much that many people like to make friends with me . I am tall and slim. I don’t hate English any more ,on the contrary,  I can talk with foreigners in English. I often go to the English corner in order to practice my oral English. 

试题分析：这是一篇提纲作文。本文作者分三部分别写过去的她，为什么转变以及现在的她 。 写过去的她和转折点时用一般过去时，写现在的她用现在时态。
【亮点说明】文中使用了非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少，例如by doing ,used to, be afraid of,play with ,make friends,in order to 等短语，以及如hate和like,tall和short ，fat 和slim，shy 和outgong等反义词作对比，文中还用到了状语从句When  I was a junior high school student, when I am a junior high school student ，I have changed so much that many people like to make friends with me 。文章层次清晰，内容饱满，表达流畅。