Question

8．你觉得你的校园生活安全吗？请你写一篇题为"How to Keep Safe in School"的短文．谈谈你的看法．
内容包括：
1．描述一件发生在你身上或你看到的发生在校园的意外事件（经过与结果）．
2．提出解决这种校园意外事件的建议（至少两条）．
3．呼吁每个学生要注意校园安全．
作文要求：
1．不能照抄原文；不得在作文中出现学校真实的名称和学生的真实姓名．如需使用学校
名称或学生的姓名，请一律使用Hilltop School和Tom．
2．语句连贯，词数80个左右．作文的开头已经给出，不计入总词数，也不必抄写在答
题卡上．请将作文写在答卷指定的位置上．
How to Keep Safe in School
Do you know that our school life could be dangerous if we are not careful enough？For example．one day，two students ran after each other in the hallway．Suddenly，one of them fell down and hurt his leg because of the wet floor．So，he had to stay in hospital for two weeks．
So I think students should always walk but not run in the hallways．And the teachers had better keep an eye on the students after class and stop them from running．
At last，I hope all the students should pay attention to their safety in school．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是以"How to Keep Safe in School"为题谈谈对校园安全的看法．时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1．描述一件发生在你身上或你看到的发生在校园的意外事件（经过与结果）．
2．提出解决这种校园意外事件的建议（至少两条）．
3．呼吁每个学生要注意校园安全．
常用到的重点短语：
because of 因为…
run after each other彼此追赶
fall down 摔倒
had better do sth最好做某事
keep an eye on关注…
stop sb from doing sth阻止某人做某事
pay attention to注意…
高分句型：
So I think ①students should always walk ②but not run in the hallways．
①省略了that的宾语从句，作为think的宾语．
②but not而不是，后面的动词run与前面的run动词形式一致．
And the teachers①had better ②keep an eye on the students after class and ③stop them from running．
①had better do sth最好做某事
②keep an eye on照看； 照管； 留心； 注意
③stop sb from doing sth阻止某人做某事
and 连接两个并列的动词原形短语，构成had better do sth

解答 How to Keep Safe in School
Do you know that our school life could be dangerous if we are not careful enough？For example，one day，two students ran after each other in the hallway．Suddenly，one of them fell down and hurt his leg because of the wet floor．So，he had to stay in hospital for two weeks．（经过与结果）
So I think students should always walk but not run in the hallways．（高分句型）And the teachers had better keep an eye on the students after class and stop them from running．（高分句型）（建议）
At last，I hope all the students should pay attention to their safety in school．（呼吁）

点评 本文是一篇给材料作文，短文的开头已经给出．写作时先要围绕这些要点组织材料，确定写作内容，注意将这些要点全部表达出来，并且要有适当的发挥，在谈到自己的观点时，要结合活动内容，写出自己的观点．