Question

11．你的同学李蕾乐于助人（helpful），积极乐观（positive）．她在上星期日下午回校途中帮助了一位受伤的老人．请根据提示，用英语写一篇短文向英语报English Times 投稿，简要叙述她做好事的经过，并谈谈你的感想．

What happened	an old man seriously hurt in the leg what Li Lei did
Your idea	misunderstanding（误解） or even trouble，or the right thing？ …

注意：（1）短文须包括上述全部要点，应适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
（2）词数：100左右．短文开头已给出（不计词数）．
A lot of people are reportedly unwilling to help others now．However，Li Lei acted differently．Last Sunday afternoon，on her way back to school，LiLei came across an old man lying on the ground，seriously hurt in the leg．She immediately stopped，called 120 and practiced first aid．Soon，the ambulance came．When everything was OK，she left for school．
Such is LiLei，a helpful，positive and determined person．Although there might be misunderstanding or even trouble when we do good，I strongly believe that she has done the right thing．As responsible citizens，it is our duty to help people in need．Also，helping others means helping ourselves in a sense，doesn't it？．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇图表作文．内容是简述李蕾做好事的经过，并谈谈你的感想．时态主要为一般过去时和一般现在时．人称主要为第三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1．李蕾做好事的经过；上星期日下午回校途中帮助了一位腿部受伤的老人
2．我的感想；误解还是更麻烦？或者是正确的事？
常用到的重点短语：
on one's way to  去某地的路上
come across 遇见
leave for  离开去某地
in need 处于危急中
【高分句型】
1．Last Sunday afternoon，①on her way back to school，Li Lei  ②came across an old man ③lying on the ground，seriously hurt in the leg．
①on one's way to  去某地的路上
②come across 遇见
③动名词短语作为后置定语，修饰前面的man．
2．①Although there might be misunderstanding or even trouble ②when we do good，I strongly believe ③that she has done the right thing．
①although虽然，引导的让步状语从句，不能与but连用．
②when引导的时间状语从句．
③that引导的宾语从句，作为believe的宾语．
3．As responsible citizens，①it is our duty to help people②in need．
①it作为形式主语，动词不定式做真正主语．
②in need 处于危急中，做后置定语，修饰people．

解答 A lot of people are reportedly unwilling to help others now．However，Li Lei acted differently．
Last Sunday afternoon，on her way back to school，Li Lei  came across an old man lying on the ground，seriously hurt in the leg．【高分句型】She immediately stopped，called 120 and practiced first aid．Soon，the ambulance came．When everything was OK，she left for school．（李蕾做好事的经过）
Such is Li Lei，a helpful，positive and determined person．Although there might be misunderstanding or even trouble when we do good，I strongly believe that she has done the right thing．【高分句型】As responsible citizens，it is our duty to help people in need．【高分句型】Also，helping others means helping ourselves in a sense，doesn't it？（我的感想）

点评 本文是一篇记叙文，记叙文包括时间、地点、人物、事件，首先叙述做好事的经过，将对此好事表明自己的感情提升为要点，更为重要进行阐述，写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化．
一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题．平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果．