Question

请仔细审图，假设这是Jane的房间，请你根据提示词汇帮她描述一下房间内物品的摆放情况。
要求：以第一人称描述，不少于60词。开头已给出，不计入总词数。
提示词汇：bed, picture, wall(墙), bookcase, dresser, alarm clock, computer, CDs

This is my room. It’s very clean!
                                                                  
                                                                 
                                                                  
                                                                 
                                                                  
                                                                 
                                                                  
                                                                 
                                                                 
                                                                 

Answer 1

This is my room．It’s very clean! My jacket is on the bed. And my shoes are under the bed．My alarm clock is on the dresser. Those are my pictures. They are on the wall．Where are my books? Look! They are in my bookcase．And on the desk are my computer and some CDs.

试题分析：这是一篇图片作文。本文要求按照题目要求结合图片中的内容完成这篇介绍房间摆设的作文。写作中要包含房间内物品的摆放位置、注意方位的描述等。根据材料内容可知本文主要是一般现在时态，人称主要是第一人称，注意并列连词的使用及主谓一致问题。写作中注意上下文的过度，符合逻辑关系。
【亮点说明】这篇短文简明、扼要地介绍了房间的布局，并包含了文中所要求的基本信息。其中句式灵活、多变，介词短语的准确使用为文章增色不少.如on the bed，under the bed，Those are my pictures.，Where are my books? Look!，最为值得称道的是倒装句式的运用很到位，如And on the desk are my computer and some CDs.学习中再注意总结,牢记一些固定句式及短语,写作时就可以适当引用,使文章的表达更有逻辑性,更富有条理。