Question

20．2015年4月11日，南京溧水傅家边山地半程马拉松比赛（Nanjing Lishui Fujiabian Mountain Half-Marathon）在傅家边隆重举行．假如你是李华，请用英语给你的笔友Jim写一封电子邮件，告诉他关于本届半程马拉松的相关情况和你对举办这样比赛的看法．

要求：
1．邮件需包括所有提示内容，可适当发挥．
2．词数：80字左右，信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
3．文中不能出现真实的姓名和学校名称．
Dear Jim，
I'm very glad to tell you something about Mountain Half-Marathon which was held in Fujiabian，Lishui．
You know health is becoming more and more important in our daily life．In order to encourage more people to take part in sports and keep the body healthy，our local government held this big event．And at the same time，it was a good chance to show the beauty of my hometown．Because it was mountain half-marathon，runners needed to finish about 21-kilometre-long race，and all the runners must be over 18 years old and healthy．During this event，there were lots of volu nteers．Some of them worked as doctors，some kept the event safe and others provided free drinks and food．With the help of all these people，the event had a big success．I hope more events like this can be held in the future．
Please come and visit my hometown．I will show you around my beautiful hometown．
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇图表作文．内容是讲述半程马拉松比赛的目的；距离；运动员；志愿者；及作者的观点．时态主要为一般过去时．人称主要为第三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1比赛的目的：保持健康，展示溧水的美丽．
2距离：大约21km
3运动员：18岁以上，健康
4志愿者：工作者例如医生，提供免费饮料
5我的观点
常用到的重点短语：
比较级+and+比较级  越来越…
in order to  为了…
take part in 参加
with the help of 在…的帮助下
【高分句型】
1．①In order to ②encourage more people to ③take part in sports and keep the body healthy，our local government held this big event．
①in order to  为了…做目的状语．
②encourage sb to do sth 鼓励某人去做某事
③take part in 参加
2．With the help of all these people，the event had a big success．
with the help of 在…的帮助下
3．I hope①more events ②like this③can be held in the future．
①hope后是省略了that的宾语从句．
②like this 做后置定语，修饰events．
③情态动词的被动语态"情态动词+be+过去分词

解答 Dear Jim，
I'm very glad to tell you something about Mountain Half-Marathon which was held in Fujiabian，Lishui．
You know health is becoming more and more important in our daily life．In order to encourage more people to take part in sports and keep the body healthy，our local government held this big event．【高分句型】And at the same time，it was a good chance to show the beauty of my hometown．（保持健康，展示溧水的美丽）Because it was mountain half-marathon，runners needed to finish about 21-kilometre-long race，（大约21km的路程）and all the runners must be over 18 years old and healthy．（18岁以上，健康）During this event，there were lots of volunteers．Some of them worked as doctors，some kept the event safe and others provided free drinks and food．With the help of all these people，the event had a big success．【高分句型】（志愿者：工作者例如医生，提供免费饮料）I hope more events like this can be held in the future．（我的观点）【高分句型】
Please come and visit my hometown．I will show you around my beautiful hometown．
Li Hua

点评 这是一篇命题作文．本篇短文主要讲述偶尔在南京溧水傅家边山地举行的半程马拉松比赛，文中交代了比赛的目的；距离；运动员；志愿者；及作者的观点．写作时尤其注意主谓和时态的正确．可适当使用一些连词来增加文章的逻辑性，使文章更通顺流畅．